Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I want to read new books and study in a quiet environment, as I find it hard to concentrate amid noise.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific details about your activities.

例: Usually, I read new books and study in the library because it offers a peaceful atmosphere, which helps me concentrate better.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' to explain reasons clearly and avoid repetition.

例: When I was a kid, I had just moved to Kurukshetra, so I didn't go to the library because we didn't know its location.

提案: Make your answer more natural by avoiding awkward phrases and repetition. Use simpler, clearer sentences and provide specific information or examples.

例: In my opinion, Chinese children are encouraged to visit libraries regularly because libraries are valuable sources of knowledge.

× Yes, of course I usually go to library but that I want to read something new and I also go to library when I want a quiet environment to study because I can't concentrate on hustle and bustle.

✓ Yes, of course I usually go to the library when I want to read something new and I also go to the library when I want a quiet environment to study because I can't concentrate on the hustle and bustle.

The noun 'library' is a singular countable noun and requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Similarly, 'hustle and bustle' is a fixed phrase that requires the definite article 'the'. Omitting 'the' before these nouns is incorrect in English grammar.

× As I have mentioned earlier earlier that I like to read books that are new there and I like to study there because it provides, it provides a quiet environment. So I I can consider it very easily there.

✓ As I have mentioned earlier, I like to read new books there and I like to study there because it provides a quiet environment. So I can concentrate very easily there.

The sentence has redundancy ('earlier earlier'), unnecessary repetition ('it provides, it provides'), and awkward phrasing ('consider it very easily'). Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness. 'Concentrate' is the appropriate verb here instead of 'consider'.

× Actually, when I was kid, I just shifted to to the Kurukshetra. So I didn't go to library because we didn't even know where the library is.

✓ Actually, when I was a kid, I just shifted to Kurukshetra. So I didn't go to the library because we didn't even know where the library was.

The phrase 'when I was kid' requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'kid'. 'Kurukshetra' is a proper noun and does not need 'the'. Also, 'library' as a specific place requires 'the'. The verb tense in the last clause should be past tense 'was' to match the past context.

× According to my opinion, China has also a specific rule in which it is written that the kids should have to should have to go to library to read something, to read books, because the library is a warehouse of knowledge.

✓ In my opinion, China also has a specific rule stating that kids should have to go to the library to read books because the library is a warehouse of knowledge.

The phrase 'should have to should have to' is redundant and incorrect; only one modal verb phrase is needed. 'According to my opinion' is better expressed as 'In my opinion'. 'Library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.