Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'after deciding taking off the semester' 대신 'after deciding to take a semester off'라고 해야 합니다. 또한, 문장이 길고 중복된 표현이 있으니 간결하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: When I was at university, I went to the library every day to study and meet my friends. However, after I decided to take a semester off, I haven't visited the library.

提案: 답변이 길고 중복된 표현이 많으며, 문장 연결이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 'because'와 'so'를 적절히 사용하여 문장을 간결하고 논리적으로 연결하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I usually study difficult subjects like anatomy, physiology, and microbiology in the library because I find them challenging and need a quiet place to focus.

提案: 문법 오류와 중복된 표현이 많아 답변이 명확하지 않습니다. 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고, 문장을 간결하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: No, I didn't go to the library as a child because I usually went to an academy for studying. Also, I didn't enjoy reading books, so my parents didn't send me to the library.

提案: 답변이 다소 불명확하고 반복적입니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 자신의 의견을 명확하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but in Korea, children often go to the library to do their homework and study.

× When I attended university, every day I went to the library for studying and then meeting my friends.

✓ When I attended university, every day I went to the library to study and then meet my friends.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'for studying and then meeting' which is not the correct form after 'for'. The correct form is the infinitive 'to study' and 'to meet' or simply 'to study and then meet'. This improves sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× But yes, after deciding taking off the semester I've never visited.

✓ But yes, after deciding to take off the semester, I've never visited.

The phrase 'deciding taking off' is incorrect because 'decide' is followed by the infinitive form 'to take', not the gerund 'taking'. Therefore, it should be 'deciding to take off the semester'.

× I usually study my major like anatomy and Physiology or microbiology because they are really hard so I thought that I need to study myself so I usually studied it in the library.

✓ I usually studied my major subjects like anatomy, physiology, or microbiology because they were really hard, so I thought that I needed to study by myself, so I usually studied them in the library.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses inconsistently. Since the context is past, 'study' should be 'studied', 'are' should be 'were', 'need' should be 'needed', and 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural subjects. Also, 'study myself' is incorrect; it should be 'study by myself'.

× No, because when I was young I usually go to Academy for studying so and then I I think I really I didn't enjoy reading a book so my parents also didn't send me to the library.

✓ No, because when I was young I usually went to an academy for studying, and then I think I really didn't enjoy reading books, so my parents also didn't send me to the library.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match 'when I was young'. Also, 'Academy' should be preceded by an article 'an academy'. The phrase 'reading a book' is better as 'reading books' to generalize. The sentence structure is improved by adding commas and conjunctions.

× Actually, I don't know because I'm Korean, so you ask me about Chinese.

✓ Actually, I don't know because I'm Korean, so you are asking me about Chinese people.

The phrase 'you ask me about Chinese' is incomplete and unclear. It should specify 'Chinese people' or 'Chinese kids'. Also, 'you ask' is better as 'you are asking' to fit the context.