Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับปรุงความชัดเจนและความถูกต้องของประโยค รวมถึงการใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้คำตอบมีความลื่นไหลและเข้าใจง่ายขึ้น

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy the quiet atmosphere. It helps me focus on my studies and relieve stress after a busy day.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม รวมถึงเพิ่มคำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด

例: I usually read books in the library. For example, my favorite book is 'Serena', which is about a girl with red hair who can fly. I like it because it describes a magical world that makes me feel excited and fulfilled.

提案: ปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคมีความสมบูรณ์และลื่นไหลมากขึ้น

例: Yes, I went to the library very often when I was a kid. The librarians even remembered me. I usually went there after lunch or while waiting for my mom to pick me up from school.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิดอย่างมีเหตุผล

例: Yes, I think many Chinese kids often go to the library because they face a lot of pressure in their studies. They use books to improve their knowledge and study hard, sometimes up to 10 hours a day, to succeed in their careers.

× I always like ferries since I was a kid since I like quite atmospheric and everyone on.

✓ I have always liked libraries since I was a kid because I find them quite atmospheric and everyone is quiet.

The sentence uses 'ferries' instead of 'libraries', which is likely a vocabulary error. 'Since I like quite atmospheric' is incorrect; 'atmospheric' is an adjective and needs a subject and verb to describe. The phrase 'everyone on' is incomplete and unclear. The correction clarifies meaning and corrects adjective and sentence structure usage.

× I believe that's on their tags and their books and it's helped me fill climbs and cope with stress.

✓ I believe that's on their shelves and their books, and it's helped me feel calm and cope with stress.

The phrase 'that's on their tags' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'tags' should be 'shelves'. 'Fill climbs' is a mishearing or typo for 'feel calm'. Pronouns and nouns are misused, leading to confusion. The correction replaces incorrect pronouns and words with appropriate ones.

× My favorite book is Serena which is the girl who has red hair and can fly a duck on.

✓ My favorite book is Serena, which is about a girl who has red hair and can fly a duck.

The sentence lacks commas to separate clauses and uses 'can fly a duck on' which is unclear. The definite article 'the' is misused before 'girl'. The correction adds commas and clarifies the sentence structure and article usage.

× The reason why I like this book because this book is talking about magical world and making me feel fulfillment and also make me feel excited.

✓ The reason why I like this book is because it talks about a magical world and makes me feel fulfilled and excited.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'because' after 'The reason why I like this book', causing redundancy. 'Talking about magical world' lacks an article before 'magical world'. Verb forms 'making' and 'make' are inconsistent. The correction fixes sentence structure and verb agreement.

× Yes, every times.

✓ Yes, every time.

The phrase 'every times' is incorrect because 'every' is followed by a singular noun. The correct phrase is 'every time'.

× I go to the library very often.

✓ I go to the library very often.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× And all of those teachers who take care of libraries already remember my face.

✓ And all of the teachers who take care of the library already remember my face.

'Those teachers' is less appropriate than 'the teachers' when referring to specific known teachers. 'Libraries' should be singular 'library' to match context. The correction adjusts pronouns and noun number for clarity.

× I usually go when I'm finished eating a lunch and when I wait for my mom to pick me up from school.

✓ I usually go when I've finished eating lunch and when I wait for my mom to pick me up from school.

The article 'a' before 'lunch' is unnecessary because 'lunch' is an uncountable meal noun. The correction removes 'a' and uses present perfect 'I've finished' for completed action.

× Yes, I think all of those kids will definitely go to the library since there has a lot of pressures on their study and they need to enhance those knowledge by the books in library in order to be successful in their careers.

✓ Yes, I think all of those kids will definitely go to the library since there is a lot of pressure on their studies and they need to enhance their knowledge by reading books in the library in order to be successful in their careers.

'There has a lot of pressures' is incorrect; 'there is a lot of pressure' is correct. 'Pressures' should be singular 'pressure' as an uncountable noun here. 'Their study' should be plural 'studies'. 'Those knowledge' is incorrect; 'knowledge' is uncountable and should be 'their knowledge'. 'By the books in library' is awkward; 'by reading books in the library' is clearer.

× They study very hard to form 10 hours per day I guess.

✓ They study very hard for about 10 hours per day, I guess.

'To form 10 hours' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'for' to indicate duration. Adding 'about' makes the estimate clearer. The correction fixes preposition and quantifier usage.