Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Та хариултаа илүү байгалийн, товч бөгөөд ойлгомжтой болгох хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, цагийн хязгаарлалт болон очих давтамжийг илүү тодорхой, энгийн хэлбэрээр илэрхийлэх нь зүйтэй. Мөн илүү холбогч үг ашиглан өгүүлбэрүүдийг уялдуулах хэрэгтэй.

例: I usually go to the library twice on weekends because it opens from 6:00 AM to 3:00 PM. This schedule fits well with my free time, so I can study there comfortably.

提案: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик холбоотой болгох хэрэгтэй. Мөн 'peace' гэдэг үгний оронд илүү тодорхой сэдвийг ашиглах, үгсийн сангаа өргөжүүлэх шаардлагатай. Холбогч үг ашиглан санаагаа илүү сайн дамжуулж болно.

例: I usually study subjects like business and mathematics in the library. I especially enjoy business because there are many books related to it, which help me learn better.

提案: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, алдаагүй, логик холбоотой болгох хэрэгтэй. Илүү энгийн, ойлгомжтой өгүүлбэр ашиглаж, давтагдалыг арилгах шаардлагатай. Мөн цаг хугацааг илүү тодорхой зааж өгнө үү.

例: When I was seven years old, I used to go to the library once a week. At that time, I was in the first grade and I enjoyed reading books there.

提案: Хариултаа илүү бүтээлч, тодорхой, алдаагүй болгох хэрэгтэй. Холбогч үг ашиглан өгүүлбэрүүдийг уялдуулах, илүү нарийвчилсан тайлбар өгөх шаардлагатай. Мөн үгсийн сангаа өргөжүүлж, илүү байгалийн хэллэг ашиглахыг зөвлөж байна.

例: Yes, Chinese children often go to the library after school because it has many interesting books on various subjects, which helps them learn more effectively.

× I go to the library in twice in a weekend and my local library works from morning 6:00 AM to afternoon 3:00 PM, so I need to.

✓ I go to the library twice in a weekend and my local library works from 6:00 AM to 3:00 PM, so I need to.

The preposition 'in' before 'twice' is incorrect; 'twice' does not require a preposition. Also, 'from morning 6:00 AM to afternoon 3:00 PM' is awkward; better to say 'from 6:00 AM to 3:00 PM'. Remove unnecessary prepositions for clarity.

× I do my lessons such as peace, good business and mathematics. I usually like do my business study because there are a lot of book that associated with my business subject and I like it.

✓ I do my lessons such as peace, good business, and mathematics. I usually like to do my business studies because there are a lot of books associated with my business subject and I like it.

The phrase 'a lot of book' is incorrect; 'book' should be plural 'books' when preceded by 'a lot of'. Also, 'business study' should be plural 'business studies' to refer to the subject area. Adding 'to' before 'do' is necessary for correct verb form.

× I, I used to go library in once in a week when I was seven years old. That means I am, I was in first grade. Yeah. I, I it's it's time.

✓ I used to go to the library once a week when I was seven years old. That means I was in first grade. Yeah. It was that time.

The preposition 'to' is missing after 'go' when referring to a place. 'In once in a week' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'once a week'. Also, 'I am, I was' is inconsistent; past tense 'I was' fits better. 'It's it's time' is unclear; 'It was that time' is clearer.

× Yes, they always go to library after school finish because library. Include so many in books, which is so interesting. And about subjects, yeah.

✓ Yes, they always go to the library after school finishes because the library includes so many books, which is very interesting. And about subjects, yeah.

The article 'the' is needed before 'library'. 'After school finish' should be 'after school finishes' to agree with singular subject. 'Include so many in books' is incorrect; correct is 'includes so many books'. Also, 'which is so interesting' is better as 'which is very interesting' for natural expression.