Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question and providing clear reasons. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

例: I don't often go to the library at the moment because I work all day. Even on my days off, I usually don't have enough energy to visit it.

提案: Your answer is interesting but incomplete and a bit unclear at the end. Try to finish your sentences fully and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, keep your answer within five sentences and make it more natural.

例: When I enter the library, I usually meditate first to calm my mind. Then, I open my journal to write down my thoughts or ideas for the day.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Try to express your ideas clearly and use proper sentence structure. Provide a direct answer followed by a reason, using linking words to connect your ideas.

例: No, I never went to the library as a child because there was no library or public infrastructure in my hometown.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to make your points clear and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and be specific in your explanation.

例: No, I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library because there are limited public facilities for children. Instead, they usually go to bookstores.

× Well, I at the moment I seldom go to the library because I had to work all day.

✓ Well, at the moment I seldom go to the library because I have to work all day.

The original sentence has a redundant and misplaced phrase 'I at the moment I' which disrupts sentence structure. Also, 'had to work' suggests past tense, but the context implies a current habitual action, so 'have to work' is appropriate. The correction removes redundancy and aligns tense with the intended meaning.

× Even on my days off I don't have energy to go to the library or I have to.

✓ Even on my days off, I don't have the energy to go to the library or I have other things I have to do.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear, ending abruptly with 'or I have to.' Adding 'other things I have to do' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'energy' should be preceded by 'the' to specify the particular energy being referred to. A comma after the introductory phrase improves readability.

× First I will do meditation to get a peaceful mind and then I will open my journal to write down what I'm thinking or what I'm.

✓ First, I meditate to get a peaceful mind, and then I open my journal to write down what I'm thinking or feeling.

The use of 'will' suggests future actions, but the context is about habitual actions, so present simple tense is appropriate. Also, the phrase 'what I'm' is incomplete; adding 'feeling' completes the thought. Commas improve sentence clarity.

× No, I never went to the library when I was a little child because there was no library in the place, in my hometown and there the public. And infrastructure.

✓ No, I never went to the library when I was a little child because there was no library in my hometown, and there was no public infrastructure.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the fragments into a coherent sentence improves clarity. Adding 'was' before 'no public infrastructure' corrects the verb omission. Removing 'in the place' and rephrasing improves naturalness.

× No, I don't think so. I there are limited public facilities for children to stay and if children they will probably go to the bookstore.

✓ No, I don't think so. There are limited public facilities for children to stay, and if children do, they will probably go to the bookstore.

The original sentence has an unnecessary pronoun 'I' before 'there are' and an awkward phrase 'if children they will.' Removing 'I' and adding 'do' after 'if children' corrects the sentence structure and improves clarity.