Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use clear and concise sentences, and correct word choices like 'read' instead of 'trade'. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences and make it more natural.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading history books. I usually visit my local library to read about different historical events and discover new topics that interest me.

提案: Avoid starting sentences with conjunctions like 'And'. Use singular/plural forms correctly, e.g., 'types' instead of 'type'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually browse through various types of history books to find topics that fascinate me. Moreover, I prefer studying in the library because it is quiet and peaceful, which helps me concentrate better.

提案: Avoid repetition and incorrect word usage like 'create' books. Use precise vocabulary and clear sentence structure. Also, try to provide more specific details.

例: When I was a kid, we went to the school library every week. Our school had a large library, and our teacher would take us there to read some fascinating books.

提案: Avoid vague phrases like 'I'm sure about this'. Use more formal and clear expressions. Also, try to link your ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

例: Although I am not certain how often Chinese children visit libraries, I know that schools in China usually have libraries and encourage students to study there regularly.

× I just I certainly go to the library regularly.

✓ I certainly go to the library regularly.

The sentence contains a repetition of 'I just I' which is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence structure. Removing the repeated phrase improves clarity and correctness.

× I often visit my local library to trade about history and explore new topic.

✓ I often visit my local library to read about history and explore new topics.

The word 'trade' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'read'. Also, 'new topic' should be plural 'new topics' to match the context of exploring multiple subjects.

× I usually go through various type of history books and and look for the topics that fascinate me.

✓ I usually go through various types of history books and look for the topics that fascinate me.

The phrase 'various type' is incorrect; 'various' requires a plural noun, so it should be 'various types'. Also, the repeated 'and' is redundant and should be removed.

× And I usually go through various type of history books and and look for the topics that fascinate me.

✓ I usually go through various types of history books and look for the topics that fascinate me.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally discouraged in formal speech. Also, the repeated 'and' is an error and should be removed for clarity.

× Just as a kid, we would go to the library every week.

✓ When I was a kid, I would go to the library every week.

The phrase 'Just as a kid' is awkward and the pronoun 'we' is unclear. Changing to 'When I was a kid' and using 'I' clarifies the subject and improves sentence flow.

× We had a very big library library in our school.

✓ We had a very big library in our school.

The word 'library' is repeated unnecessarily. Removing the duplicate word corrects the sentence.

× we would create some fascinating books.

✓ we would read some fascinating books.

The verb 'create' is incorrect in this context; the intended meaning is likely 'read' books. 'Create' implies making books, which is unlikely here.

× The school system in China, they would definitely have some libraries and they would encourage kids to go and study in the library.

✓ The school system in China definitely has some libraries and encourages kids to go and study in the library.

Using both 'The school system in China' and 'they' is redundant. Rephrasing to remove 'they' and use correct verb forms improves clarity and grammar.