Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Try to avoid redundancy and improve grammar, for example, use 'review' instead of 'reviews' and 'reading' should be 'read'. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I often go to the library at my school because I live in a dormitory. Whenever I want to study or review my lessons, I go there to read and focus better.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs better grammar and clearer structure. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly, and avoid repeating words like 'sometimes'. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and keep sentences concise.

例: I usually do my homework or study in the library because my dormitory can be noisy. So, the library is the perfect place for me to concentrate.

提案: Your answer has some good points but contains unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. For example, 'wedding to my mom' is incorrect. Try to use simple, clear sentences and correct vocabulary. Also, organize your answer with a topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I often went to the library when I was a kid, especially after school. I liked reading comics and studying there while waiting for my mom to pick me up.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more natural. Avoid repeating 'because' and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like 'especially' and 'so' correctly. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid awkward phrases.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library, especially during exam periods. Since many share dorm rooms, the library provides a quiet place where they can study more effectively.

× Yes, I usually go to the library, especially library in my school when I leave there.

✓ Yes, I usually go to the library, especially the library in my school when I leave there.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library in my school' to specify which library is being referred to.

× First of all I will tell you that I live in a dormitory, so every time if I want to study or want to reviews for my studies, I just go there and reading my stuff every time.

✓ First of all, I will tell you that I live in a dormitory, so every time I want to study or want to review for my studies, I just go there and read my stuff every time.

The verb 'reviews' should be 'review' as it is the base form after 'want to'. Also, 'reading' should be 'read' to match the simple present tense. Added comma after 'First of all' for clarity.

× When I go to the library, sometimes I just doing my work or I just doing my homework.

✓ When I go to the library, sometimes I just do my work or I just do my homework.

The verb 'doing' is incorrect here; it should be the base form 'do' after 'I just' to form the correct present tense.

× Because sometimes if you stay at in your dorm, sometimes there's so many noise that make you cannot concentrate with what you want to do.

✓ Because sometimes if you stay in your dorm, sometimes there's so much noise that makes you cannot concentrate on what you want to do.

The preposition 'at in' is incorrect; it should be 'in'. 'So many noise' should be 'so much noise' because 'noise' is uncountable. 'Make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular 'noise'. 'Concentrate with' should be 'concentrate on'.

× So sometimes library is the perfect place to do that thing.

✓ So sometimes the library is the perfect place to do that thing.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library' to specify the place being referred to.

× I think in that time after school, every day I went to the library for studying or just funny comics, books to read and read at the time for wedding to my mom, wedding my mom to pick me up.

✓ I think at that time after school, every day I went to the library to study or just read funny comics and books while waiting for my mom to pick me up.

'In that time' should be 'at that time'. 'For studying' should be 'to study'. 'Just funny comics, books to read and read' is awkward; corrected to 'just read funny comics and books'. 'Wedding to my mom' is incorrect; should be 'waiting for my mom'. Repetition of 'wedding my mom' removed.

× Yeah, I still love to go to library, especially when the examination period, because I think they go there to study because they need to stay in their dorm and their dorm maybe four people sleep together.

✓ Yeah, I still love to go to the library, especially during the examination period, because I think they go there to study since they need to stay in their dorm, and their dorm may have four people sleeping together.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'library' and 'examination period'. 'When the examination period' should be 'during the examination period'. 'Maybe four people sleep together' should be 'may have four people sleeping together' for correct tense and structure.

× So they need to find a space to study that more effectively.

✓ So they need to find a space to study more effectively.

The word 'that' is unnecessary and incorrect here; it should be removed to make the sentence correct.