Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to avoid repeating words like 'very' and 'I can'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it provides a quiet environment without distractions. Therefore, I can focus on my studies and complete a lot of work. Additionally, I enjoy reading story books there during my free time.

提案: Your answer contains many fillers like 'uh' which affect fluency. Also, some sentences are unclear or grammatically incorrect. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words and avoid filler words to sound more natural.

例: Whenever I work on projects with my friends, I prefer going to the library for research. Moreover, the library offers digital resources accessible via the Internet, which help me gather information for my assignments. Since it is a quiet place, it helps me avoid distractions while studying.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors such as 'oftenly' instead of 'often' and inconsistent tenses. Also, avoid repeating 'environment' multiple times. Use past tense consistently and provide clear, specific details.

例: Yes, I often went to the library with my parents when I was a kid. I used to borrow story books and enjoyed reading them there. The library was a quiet and peaceful place where I also did my homework.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and repetitive. Avoid repeating words and finish your sentences clearly. Provide specific examples of activities Chinese kids do in the library to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often visit the library because they participate in various activities such as reading sessions and group learning with their teachers. These activities help them develop good reading habits and improve their knowledge.

× I can do my lot of work there

✓ I can do a lot of work there

The phrase 'my lot of work' is incorrect because 'lot of' is a quantifier that should not be preceded by a possessive pronoun 'my'. The correct form is 'a lot of work' to indicate a large amount of work.

× there is also a digital resources which I help through the Internet

✓ there are also digital resources which I access through the Internet

The subject 'resources' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'help through the Internet' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'access' when referring to using digital resources online.

× I prefer to go to the library regarding the, uh, research

✓ I prefer to go to the library for research

The preposition 'regarding' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to express purpose is 'for' as in 'for research'.

× I borrow the story books and enjoy reading them

✓ I borrowed the story books and enjoyed reading them

The sentence is in past tense context, so the verbs should be in past tense: 'borrowed' and 'enjoyed'. Also, 'story books' should be one word 'storybooks' or 'story books' is acceptable but 'borrowed' is the main correction here.

× I oftenly go with my parents

✓ I often went with my parents

The adverb 'oftenly' is incorrect; the correct form is 'often'. Also, since the question is about past habits, the verb should be in past tense 'went' instead of 'go'.

× there is no distraction

✓ there are no distractions

The noun 'distraction' should be plural 'distractions' because it refers to multiple possible distractions, and the verb should agree in number: 'are' instead of 'is'.

× they enjoy they enjoy the reading, reading books there with their teachers and with their

✓ they enjoy reading books there with their teachers and with their friends

The phrase 'they enjoy they enjoy the reading, reading books' is repetitive and incorrect. It should be 'they enjoy reading books'. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'friends' completes the thought logically.