Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'discuss the lesson, which I think is so difficult for me' nên được diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I often go to the school library with my friends or teachers. We usually discuss lessons that I find difficult, which helps me understand better.

提案: Bạn nên tránh dùng cụm từ không chính xác như 'discuss about' và câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: In the library, I usually discuss difficult topics with my friend. She explains things I don't understand, which helps me improve my knowledge.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản và đúng ngữ pháp, tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như 'Nor in my work'.

例: No, I didn't go to the library often when I was a kid because my parents were usually busy with their work.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để câu có tính logic hơn.

例: I think Chinese kids often go to the library because they have enough free time and want to meet friends there.

× I usually discuss about the difficulties with my friend.

✓ I usually discuss the difficulties with my friend.

The verb 'discuss' is transitive and does not require the preposition 'about'. Using 'discuss about' is incorrect. The correct form is 'discuss the difficulties'. This is a common mistake with verbs that already imply the preposition.

× She will explain the difficulties which I don't understand for me and make me better than on my story.

✓ She explains the difficulties which I don't understand to me and helps me improve my story.

The use of 'will' here is inappropriate because the action is habitual, so present simple tense 'explains' is better. Also, 'explain ... for me' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to me'. The phrase 'make me better than on my story' is unclear and should be 'helps me improve my story' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Nor in my work is my parent usually busy with their job, so they don't have many time to take me away to the library.

✓ No, my parents are usually busy with their work, so they don't have much time to take me to the library.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and uses 'Nor' incorrectly at the beginning. 'My parent' should be plural 'my parents' to match 'their'. 'Many time' is incorrect; 'much time' is used with uncountable nouns like 'time'. 'Take me away to the library' is awkward; 'take me to the library' is correct.

× I think in Chinese are usually go to the library because they are very because they have many time to go to library and they want to make me friend at the Public Library.

✓ I think Chinese kids usually go to the library because they have a lot of time to go there and they want to make friends at the Public Library.

The original sentence has multiple structural errors: 'in Chinese are usually go' is incorrect; it should be 'Chinese kids usually go'. The phrase 'they are very because' is incomplete and should be removed. 'Many time' should be 'a lot of time' or 'much time'. 'Make me friend' is incorrect; it should be 'make friends'. Also, 'go to library' needs the article 'the' or 'there' to be correct.