Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence clarity. Use correct vocabulary and grammar, for example, replace 'wish library' with 'visit the library'. Also, keep your answer concise and natural, limiting to 3-4 sentences.

例: Yes, I often visit the library in the evenings because I enjoy reading story books and other informative materials. I usually spend about two to three hours there to enhance my knowledge.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and correct word usage. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say 'I mainly read story books because I am interested in them. Additionally, I read some political science books as I am an IMR student.'

例: In the library, I mainly read story books because I find them interesting. Additionally, since I am an IMR student, I also read some political science books to support my studies.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity. Use past tense correctly and avoid confusing phrases. For example, say 'No, I did not go to the library when I was a child because I did not understand the importance of education then. Instead, I spent most of my time playing with other children.'

例: No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because I did not realize the importance of education at that time. I mostly spent my time playing with other children.

提案: Avoid vague statements and improve sentence structure. Provide a clear opinion with reasons. For example, say 'I don't have specific examples, but I believe Chinese children often visit libraries because education is valued worldwide.'

例: I don't have specific examples, but I believe that Chinese children often go to libraries since education is important in every part of the world.

× I like to wish library every evening because I love reading books like story books and that books that means my knowledge.

✓ I like to visit the library every evening because I love reading books like story books and those books that increase my knowledge.

The verb 'wish' is incorrectly used instead of 'visit'. Also, 'that books' should be 'those books' to correctly refer to plural nouns. The preposition 'to' is correctly used with 'visit'.

× I like to wish library every evening because I love reading books like story books and that books that means my knowledge.

✓ I like to visit the library every evening because I love reading books like story books and those books that increase my knowledge.

The phrase 'that books' is incorrect because 'that' is singular demonstrative pronoun, but 'books' is plural. It should be 'those books' to match plural noun.

× So every evening I spend 2 to 3 hours in my nearby library.

✓ So every evening I spend 2 to 3 hours at my nearby library.

The preposition 'in' is less appropriate here; 'at' is commonly used to indicate spending time at a place like a library.

× Mainly I do story learn story books because I'm interested in story books as well as I also read books little political science because IMR student so that's why I like to practical science books.

✓ Mainly, I read story books because I'm interested in them. I also read some political science books because I am an IMR student, so that's why I like practical science books.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Do story learn story books' is incorrect; it should be 'read story books'. The sentence needs to be split and restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× No, I cannot go to library when I was scared, because today that time we cannot know about the importance of education and on that time I spend a lot of time playing with other children's.

✓ No, I could not go to the library when I was a kid because at that time we did not know about the importance of education, and I spent a lot of time playing with other children.

The modal verb 'cannot' is incorrect for past ability; 'could not' is correct. 'When I was scared' is likely a mistake for 'when I was a kid'. 'Today that time' is incorrect; 'at that time' is correct. 'Children's' is possessive but should be plural 'children'.

× No, I cannot go to library when I was scared, because today that time we cannot know about the importance of education and on that time I spend a lot of time playing with other children's.

✓ No, I could not go to the library when I was a kid because at that time we did not know about the importance of education, and I spent a lot of time playing with other children.

The phrase 'go to library' needs the definite article 'the' before 'library'. 'On that time' should be 'at that time' as the correct preposition for time expressions.

× No, I cannot go to library when I was scared, because today that time we cannot know about the importance of education and on that time I spend a lot of time playing with other children's.

✓ No, I could not go to the library when I was a kid because at that time we did not know about the importance of education, and I spent a lot of time playing with other children.

'Children's' is possessive form but here plural 'children' is needed as the object of 'playing with'.

× So I think Chinese peoples are also go to a library because education is important every SE every part of world.

✓ So I think Chinese people also go to libraries because education is important in every part of the world.

'Peoples' is incorrect here; 'people' is the plural of person. 'A library' should be plural 'libraries' to generalize. 'Every SE every part of world' is unclear and corrected to 'in every part of the world'.

× So I think Chinese peoples are also go to a library because education is important every SE every part of world.

✓ So I think Chinese people also go to libraries because education is important in every part of the world.

'In' is the correct preposition to indicate location or area, so 'in every part of the world' is correct.