Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use complete sentences with correct grammar and include linking words to make your answer more natural and clear. For example, mention why you go to the library and how often, using proper prepositions and articles.

例: Yes, since I'm a Year 12 student, I always go to the library after school because it provides a quiet environment for studying.

提案: Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary to explain your activities clearly.

例: In the library, I usually study physics and chemistry because I find these subjects challenging. After revising them, I complete my maths homework.

提案: Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly and politely. Also, be careful with word choice to express your ideas appropriately.

例: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because I believe most children prefer to relax after school rather than do a lot of work.

提案: Try to avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to organise your ideas logically and improve clarity. Also, use correct grammar and vocabulary to express your opinion effectively.

例: That's an interesting question. I think whether Chinese kids go to the library often depends on their personality. For example, hardworking and determined students are more likely to visit the library regularly.

× Yes, since I'm a year 12 student I always go library after school.

✓ Yes, since I'm a year 12 student I always go to the library after school.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating a destination. Omitting 'to' before 'library' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'go to the library.'

× I usually do studies for physics or chemistry these two because I'm a struggle for these two subject and after finish these two like revising I would do my maths homework.

✓ I usually study physics or chemistry because I struggle with these two subjects, and after finishing revising them, I do my maths homework.

The phrase 'do studies' is unnatural; 'study' is the correct verb. 'I'm a struggle for these two subject' is incorrect; it should be 'I struggle with these two subjects.' Also, 'after finish these two like revising' is ungrammatical; it should be 'after finishing revising them.' The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Absolutely not. I think most of the people, I mean most of the kids like not usually go to library because children are not deserved to do that high amount of work after school.

✓ Absolutely not. I think most people, I mean most kids, do not usually go to the library because children do not deserve to do that high amount of work after school.

The phrase 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library.' Also, 'are not deserved' is incorrect; the correct form is 'do not deserve.' The sentence is corrected for proper article use and verb form.

× Umm, this is a good question, but I don't think it's like Chinese get off and go to the library.

✓ Umm, this is a good question, but I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library.

The phrase 'Chinese get off and go to the library' is unclear and ungrammatical. The correction simplifies and clarifies the meaning. Also, 'go to the library' requires the preposition 'to' and the definite article 'the.'

× I think it depends of people's characteristic as like their personality like if that if that if the person that is like hardworking and determined, probably he going often going to like.

✓ I think it depends on people's characteristics, like their personality. If the person is hardworking and determined, they probably go often to the library.

The phrase 'depends of' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'depends on.' 'Characteristic' should be plural 'characteristics.' The sentence is also restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness, including subject-verb agreement and pronoun use.