Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but can be more natural and detailed. Try to avoid redundancy and add a linking word to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'Sometimes I need some information about my study, so I go to the library,' you can say, 'Yes, I often go to the library because I need information for my studies.'

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I need information for my studies. It helps me find reliable books and resources that support my learning.

提案: Your answer lacks clear structure and contains grammatical errors. Use a topic sentence and link your ideas logically. Also, be specific and concise. For example, say 'In the library, I usually search for books related to my studies, especially about business skills and productivity.'

例: In the library, I usually search for books related to my studies, especially about business skills and productivity. This helps me improve my knowledge and apply it to my work.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical mistakes. Use past tense consistently and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. For example, 'Yes, I often went to my school library when I was a kid. It had many types of books, including fiction and history. I especially liked fiction because it taught me interesting facts and events.'

例: Yes, I often went to my school library when I was a kid. It had many types of books, including fiction and history. I especially liked fiction because it taught me interesting facts and events.

提案: Your answer contains grammatical errors and unclear ideas. Avoid comparisons that may sound inappropriate. Use linking words and be specific. For example, 'Yes, many Chinese kids often go to the library because they value learning. They also interact with library staff to find useful resources.'

例: Yes, many Chinese kids often go to the library because they value learning. They also interact with library staff to find useful resources and improve their knowledge.

× Searching for a book exact topic I want sometime.

✓ I search for the exact topic book I want sometimes.

The original sentence lacks a proper subject and verb form. 'Searching' is a present participle and cannot stand alone as a sentence. Adding 'I' as the subject and changing 'Searching' to 'search' makes it a complete sentence. Also, 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency.

× I usually search about a book about study and a business study, some business skills, selling skills about productivity and more information about my business.

✓ I usually search for books about study and business, some business skills, selling skills, productivity, and more information about my business.

The verb 'search' is followed by the preposition 'for' not 'about'. Also, 'a book about study and a business study' is awkward; it is better to say 'books about study and business'. The list is improved by separating items with commas and removing redundant prepositions.

× Yes I do. When I was a kid I often go to the go to my school library.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a kid, I often went to my school library.

The question is in past tense ('Did you go'), so the answer should also be in past tense. 'I do' should be 'I did'. 'I often go' should be 'I often went'. Also, 'go to the go to' is a repetition and should be corrected to 'went to'.

× There are a lot of books types, fictional and historical.

✓ There are a lot of types of books, fictional and historical.

The phrase 'books types' is incorrect; it should be 'types of books'. This corrects the singular/plural and word order issue.

× Chinese kids are more smarter than us because they value their time and try to increase their knowledge by often going to the library.

✓ Chinese kids are smarter than us because they value their time and try to increase their knowledge by often going to the library.

The phrase 'more smarter' is incorrect because 'smarter' is already a comparative adjective. Using 'more' with 'smarter' is redundant. The correct form is 'smarter'.