Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve by adding more specific details and linking words to make it more natural and effective. For example, explain why you go more during exams and what benefits you get from it.

例: Yes, I often go to the library, especially during the examination period because it provides a quiet environment that helps me concentrate better. Moreover, the library has many useful resources that support my studies.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and redundancy. Try to use correct verb tenses and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Usually, I focus on reading and studying in the library. I try to find a quiet area where I can concentrate effectively because I believe this is the best way to learn.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using correct articles and more natural phrasing. Also, add linking words to explain your reason clearly.

例: When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library often because I loved playing more than studying at that time.

提案: Your answer is a bit repetitive and wordy. Try to be more concise and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid repeating the same idea with different words.

例: I believe most Chinese kids often go to the library because they study hard to get into good universities. Therefore, they spend a lot of time there focusing on their studies.

× I always stayed focused on my reading and studying.

✓ I always stay focused on my reading and studying.

The sentence is about a habitual action, so the present tense 'stay' should be used instead of the past tense 'stayed'.

× I I'm trying to find a quiet area to sit down and focusing effectively on my studying.

✓ I'm trying to find a quiet area to sit down and focus effectively on my studying.

After 'and', the verb should be in base form 'focus' to parallel 'to find'. Using 'focusing' is incorrect here because it breaks the parallel structure.

× When I was a kid, I didn't go to library often because I love to play more than studying.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library often because I loved to play more than studying.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' in this context. Also, 'love' should be in past tense 'loved' to match the past time frame.

× So they are trying hard to go to the library often and pay attention a lot in studying.

✓ So they are trying hard to go to the library often and pay a lot of attention to studying.

The phrase 'pay attention a lot in studying' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'pay a lot of attention to studying' where 'pay attention to' is the correct collocation and 'a lot of' quantifies 'attention'.