Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が少し不自然で冗長です。英語の自然な表現を使い、直接的に質問に答え、理由を簡潔に述べることを心がけましょう。例えば、「I don't go often, but I enjoy visiting because I can discover new books.」のようにシンプルにまとめると良いです。

例: I don't go to the library very often, but I enjoy visiting because it allows me to discover new books that I wouldn't find elsewhere.

提案: 回答は内容が明確ですが、文法の誤りと繰り返しがあります。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、より自然な表現にしましょう。例えば、「I usually look for new books related to computer science, business, or economics because I want to expand my knowledge in these areas.」のように。

例: I usually look for new books related to computer science, business, or economics because I want to expand my knowledge in these areas.

提案: 「umm」が多く、流暢さが損なわれています。回答は簡潔にし、理由を明確に述べましょう。例えば、「I didn't go often as a child, but I visited frequently when preparing for university exams because the library is a quiet place to study.」のように。

例: I didn't go to the library often as a child, but I visited frequently when preparing for university entrance exams because it is a quiet place to study.

提案: 質問に対して自信を持って答えられていません。自分の意見をはっきり述べ、理由を具体的に説明しましょう。例えば、「Although I'm Japanese and not familiar with Chinese habits, I believe many Chinese children go to the library because education is highly valued in China.」のように。

例: Although I'm Japanese and not very familiar with Chinese habits, I believe many Chinese children often go to the library because education is highly valued in China.

× Still I like to go to the library because it is a good price to explore the books, which I didn't know.

✓ Still I like to go to the library because it is a good place to explore books I didn't know.

The phrase 'a good price' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'a good place' to indicate a location. Also, 'the books' is unnecessary; 'books' is sufficient when speaking generally.

× Well, I'm not real rivalry lover, but yeah, still I like it.

✓ Well, I'm not a real library lover, but yeah, I still like it.

The phrase 'real rivalry lover' is incorrect; it should be 'a real library lover'. Also, the article 'a' is missing before 'real library lover'.

× I usually go to the library and to find the new books which are related with related to the computer science, business or economics because I would like to expand my knowledge about these subjects.

✓ I usually go to the library to find new books which are related to computer science, business, or economics because I would like to expand my knowledge about these subjects.

The phrase 'related with related to' is redundant and incorrect; the correct preposition is 'related to'. Also, 'to find' should not be preceded by 'and' here.

× ...because it is nice place to learn and study.

✓ ...because it is a nice place to learn and study.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'nice place', which is necessary for singular countable nouns.