Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like repeating reasons and try to use correct grammar, for example, 'libraries are usually packed' instead of 'library usually are packed'. Also, try to keep your answer within 5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I don't often go to the library because it's usually crowded and poorly ventilated, which makes me feel uncomfortable. As a result, I sometimes end up feeling sleepy there.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by correcting grammar and using linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'I usually have focused sessions when I need to write assignments or brainstorm new projects. The silence really helps me concentrate.' Also, try to avoid repeating similar ideas and keep your answer concise.

例: I usually use the library for focused study sessions, especially when I have to write detailed assignments or brainstorm ideas for new projects. The quiet environment really helps me concentrate.

提案: Your answer provides good detail but could be more structured and grammatically correct. Use linking words to improve coherence, for example, 'I didn't often go to the library as a child because we lived in the suburbs, and the main library was two hours away in the city centre. Also, both my parents were working, so it was difficult to visit.'

例: I didn't often go to the library as a child because we lived in the suburbs, and the main library was about two hours away in the city centre. Additionally, both my parents were working, so it was hard to find the time to visit.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs better grammar and vocabulary. Avoid repeating words like 'often often' and use linking words to connect your points. For example, 'I think Chinese kids often go to the library because they tend to be studious. Moreover, many Chinese cities are concrete jungles with few parks or open spaces, so the library is one of the few places to spend time.'

例: I think Chinese kids often go to the library because they are usually very studious. Moreover, since many Chinese cities have limited parks or open spaces, the library serves as a popular place for them to spend time.

× The reason is that library usually are packed with students and the ventilation is not so good, so I always feel suffocated and end up sleeping in the library.

✓ The reason is that the library is usually packed with students and the ventilation is not so good, so I always feel suffocated and end up sleeping in the library.

The word 'library' is singular and requires the singular verb 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, the definite article 'the' is needed before 'library' to specify the place. This correction ensures subject-verb agreement and proper article usage.

× When in the library I usually have a focus sessions when I need to write a comprehensive assignment or I need to do some ideation sessions for a new project.

✓ When in the library I usually have focus sessions when I need to write a comprehensive assignment or I need to do some ideation sessions for a new project.

The phrase 'a focus sessions' is incorrect because 'sessions' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the noun phrase. This addresses the singular/plural mismatch and article usage.

× When in the library I usually have a focus sessions when I need to write a comprehensive assignment or I need to do some ideation sessions for a new project.

✓ When in the library I usually have focus sessions when I need to write a comprehensive assignment or I need to do some ideation sessions for a new project.

The noun 'sessions' is plural, so it should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the plural noun phrase.

× Umm, I didn't have much chance to go to library when I was a kid because my family home is quite in the suburban area, which means that to travel to the main library which which was in the city center took like 2 hours to get there and both of my parents were working.

✓ Umm, I didn't have much chance to go to the library when I was a kid because my family home is quite in the suburban area, which means that to travel to the main library, which was in the city center, took like 2 hours to get there and both of my parents were working.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' to specify the place. Also, the repeated word 'which' is corrected to a single 'which'. Adding commas improves sentence clarity. This addresses article usage and sentence structure.

× Umm, I didn't have much chance to go to library when I was a kid because my family home is quite in the suburban area, which means that to travel to the main library which which was in the city center took like 2 hours to get there and both of my parents were working.

✓ Umm, I didn't have much chance to go to the library when I was a kid because my family home is quite in a suburban area, which means that to travel to the main library, which was in the city center, took like 2 hours to get there and both of my parents were working.

The phrase 'quite in the suburban area' is awkward; 'quite in a suburban area' or 'quite suburban' is better. Using 'a suburban area' is more natural here. This corrects preposition and article usage.

× Well I think Chinese kids are often often go to the library because they are usually very studious.

✓ Well I think Chinese kids often go to the library because they are usually very studious.

The phrase 'are often often go' is incorrect; 'often' should not be repeated and 'are' is unnecessary here. The correct form is 'often go'. This fixes verb form and adverb placement.

× Also Chinese city are basically concrete jungle, they wouldn't have much places or park or open spaces to hang out.

✓ Also Chinese cities are basically concrete jungles; they don't have many places, parks, or open spaces to hang out.

'Chinese city are' is incorrect because 'city' is singular but the verb 'are' is plural; it should be 'cities are'. Also, 'concrete jungle' should be plural to match 'cities'. 'Wouldn't have much places or park' is incorrect; 'don't have many places, parks' is correct. This addresses subject-verb agreement, pluralization, and quantifier usage.

× Also Chinese city are basically concrete jungle, they wouldn't have much places or park or open spaces to hang out.

✓ Also, Chinese cities are basically concrete jungles, so they don't have many places, parks, or open spaces to hang out.

The original sentence is a comma splice; connecting two independent clauses with a comma is incorrect. Using 'so' as a conjunction properly connects the ideas. This fixes sentence structure and conjunction usage.

× So I think the only place is the library.

✓ So I think the only place is the library.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.