Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在口语化缩写“Cos”，不够正式；句子结构重复，且使用了不必要的疑问句“What's else?”，影响流畅性。建议避免口语缩写，简洁表达观点，并用连接词自然衔接句子。

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it is quiet, which helps me concentrate better. Moreover, studying there makes me feel relaxed and comfortable.

提案: 回答句子不完整且断断续续，缺乏连贯性。建议使用完整句子，避免重复表达，并用连接词连接观点，使回答更自然流畅。

例: As a student, I usually study in the library. In addition, I often read books there to broaden my knowledge.

提案: 回答内容较好，但句子结构稍显简单，且“because”重复使用。建议丰富句式，使用不同连接词，使表达更自然。

例: Yes, I used to go to the library as a child because I loved reading. Furthermore, my parents encouraged me to visit the library since it helped expand my horizons and boost my confidence.

提案: 回答中表达不够自信，且句子结构较为简单。建议直接回答问题，并用具体例子或原因支持观点，提升回答的说服力和流畅度。

例: I believe many Chinese children often go to the library because I have seen numerous kids there. Additionally, the government actively promotes reading among children.

× Yes of course, Cos I think the library is quiet enough for me to study and also I can be more efficient there.

✓ Yes, of course, because I think the library is quiet enough for me to study and also I can be more efficient there.

“Cos”是口语缩写形式，正式场合应使用“because”。此外，句首“Yes of course”应加逗号分隔。

× Yes of course, Cos I think the library is quiet enough for me to study and also I can be more efficient there.

✓ Yes, of course, because I think the library is quiet enough for me to study and also I can be more efficient there.

“quiet”应为“quiet enough”表示“足够安静”，这里用法正确，无需改动。

× As a student, I usually. Study in the library.

✓ As a student, I usually study in the library.

“I usually. Study”中间不应有句号，导致句子结构不完整，应合并为一句完整句子。

× Also my parents encouraged me to go to the library because they think it could expand my horizons and also makes me more confident.

✓ Also my parents encouraged me to go to the library because they thought it could expand my horizons and also make me more confident.

前半句用过去时“encouraged”，后半句应保持时态一致，故“think”改为“thought”，“makes”改为“make”。

× Also my parents encouraged me to go to the library because they think it could expand my horizons and also makes me more confident.

✓ Also my parents encouraged me to go to the library because they thought it could expand my horizons and also make me more confident.

“makes”应与主语“they”保持一致，且时态应与前文一致，故改为“make”。

× Well, I'm not sure for that, but through my observation I think yes, because I see many kids in the library and also China is encouraging children to read books.

✓ Well, I'm not sure about that, but through my observation I think yes, because I see many kids in the library and also China is encouraging children to read books.

“not sure for that”中介词用错，应为“not sure about that”。