Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain your reasons clearly and use correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: No, I don't often go to the library because it is usually crowded. I prefer to study at home where I can concentrate better without distractions.

提案: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Start with a direct answer, then add specific details using linking words. Use correct verb forms and vocabulary relevant to the context.

例: When I go to the library, I usually study English with my friends to improve our skills. Also, I like to read books that help me imagine and plan for my future.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I often went to the library as a child because I had important exams. My parents encouraged me to study hard, so I spent a lot of time there preparing for my future.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. If you don't know the answer, say so politely. Avoid vague statements and incomplete sentences. Try to give a brief opinion or explanation if possible.

例: I'm not sure because I was born in Korea, but from what I've seen in videos and media, many Chinese kids do visit libraries to study and read.

× Worthy Library is a public area, that's why many people is visiting there for studying or reading something.

✓ Worthy Library is a public area, that's why many people are visiting there for studying or reading something.

The subject 'many people' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× That's why I I want to focus on something in my area.

✓ That's why I want to focus on something in my area.

The repetition of 'I' is incorrect and disrupts sentence structure; removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence.

× When I'm busy in library, I usually study with my friend for improving my English skill.

✓ When I'm busy at the library, I usually study with my friend to improve my English skills.

The correct preposition for location is 'at' when referring to the library. Also, 'for improving' should be 'to improve' to express purpose, and 'skill' should be plural 'skills' to match context.

× Then secondly just reading some kind of for imagine my future.

✓ Then secondly, I just read some materials to imagine my future.

The phrase 'some kind of' is incomplete and incorrect here; it should specify what is read. Also, 'for imagine' should be 'to imagine' to express purpose.

× Yes, because I have a most recent exam when I was young.

✓ Yes, because I had a recent exam when I was young.

The past event requires past tense 'had' instead of present 'have'. 'Most recent' is unnecessary; 'recent' suffices.

× It's very important for our future.

✓ It was very important for our future.

Since the context is past ('when I was young'), the verb should be past tense 'was' to match the time frame.

× That's why my mom and father always pushed me for focus on study.

✓ That's why my mom and father always pushed me to focus on studying.

The verb 'push' is followed by 'to' plus base verb, so 'to focus' is correct. Also, 'on study' should be 'on studying'.

× That's why I I have to go to library when I was.

✓ That's why I had to go to the library when I was young.

The sentence refers to past obligation, so 'had to' is correct. Also, 'go to library' needs the article 'the library', and the sentence is incomplete without 'young' or similar.

× Actually I don't know where because I was born in Korea, but I just saw a lot of magazine from YouTube or some kind of media.

✓ Actually, I don't know because I was born in Korea, but I have seen a lot of magazines on YouTube or some kind of media.

'Saw' should be present perfect 'have seen' to indicate experience. 'Magazine' should be plural 'magazines'. The preposition 'from' is incorrect; 'on' is used for platforms like YouTube.