Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use the present tense consistently and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'since'. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I often go to the library, especially in the evenings. I find it very relaxing because it is quiet and peaceful. I usually go there when I feel stressed since reading books helps me calm down. Reading is one of my favourite hobbies, so the library is a perfect place for me.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and use present simple tense for habitual actions. Avoid vague phrases and be specific about your activities. Use linking words like 'and' or 'also' to connect ideas logically.

例: Usually, I go to the library to read books. I also like to explore new books by different authors. Sometimes, I read the front page and the description to decide if I want to borrow the book. This helps me find interesting books to read.

提案: Use past simple tense correctly and avoid repeating the same idea. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, I often went to the library when I was a kid. I developed a habit of reading books early on. I usually went there when I felt stressed because it helped me relax and take a break from my busy schedule.

提案: Avoid vague statistics and unclear expressions. Give a clear opinion with supporting reasons. Use correct grammar and linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

例: I think many Chinese kids enjoy going to the library, but it depends on their interests. Some prefer playing or exercising, while others like reading books. Overall, I believe about half of the kids visit the library regularly to explore new things.

× Most of the time I was preferred to go to the library at the evening time or maybe when I was feeling stressed because in this area I was feeling very relaxed, firstly because of the quiet area and second thing I feel very relaxed when I was just reading the books, which is my hobby.

✓ Most of the time I preferred to go to the library in the evening or maybe when I was feeling stressed because in this area I felt very relaxed, firstly because of the quiet environment and secondly, I felt very relaxed when I was just reading books, which is my hobby.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'was preferred' which is not the correct past tense form for expressing preference. 'Preferred' is the simple past tense and should be used without 'was'. Also, 'at the evening time' should be 'in the evening' as per standard English preposition usage. The verb 'feel' should be in past tense 'felt' to maintain consistency with the past context. Additionally, 'second thing' should be 'secondly' for proper adverbial use.

× Most of the time I was preferred to go to the library at the evening time or maybe when I was feeling stressed because in this area I was feeling very relaxed, firstly because of the quiet area and second thing I feel very relaxed when I was just reading the books, which is my hobby.

✓ Most of the time I preferred to go to the library in the evening or maybe when I was feeling stressed because in this area I felt very relaxed, firstly because of the quiet environment and secondly, I felt very relaxed when I was just reading books, which is my hobby.

The phrase 'at the evening time' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' for parts of the day, so it should be 'in the evening'. Also, 'because of the quiet area' is better expressed as 'because of the quiet environment' for clarity and naturalness.

× My schedule is to go for a library just to read books sometime I was exploring the new books which was coming by the author and I also prefer to read that one also just in their front page but was the most description written in that book.

✓ My schedule is to go to the library just to read books. Sometimes I explored new books which were released by the author, and I also preferred to read just their front pages, but most of the description was written inside the book.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'Sometime I was exploring' should be 'Sometimes I explored' to indicate habitual past action. 'Which was coming by the author' is incorrect; it should be 'which were released by the author' to agree in number and use correct verb form. 'I also prefer' should be 'I also preferred' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Just in their front page' should be 'just their front pages' for plural agreement and correct preposition. 'Was the most description written' is awkward and corrected to 'most of the description was written'.

× My schedule is to go for a library just to read books sometime I was exploring the new books which was coming by the author and I also prefer to read that one also just in their front page but was the most description written in that book.

✓ My schedule is to go to the library just to read books. Sometimes I explored new books which were released by the author, and I also preferred to read just their front pages, but most of the description was written inside the book.

The phrase 'go for a library' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'go to the library'. Also, 'just in their front page' should be 'just their front pages' without 'in' to be grammatically correct.

× To be honest, I was going to a library when I was a kid because at that time I was made my habit of reading books a lot because it is my habit when I was feeling stressed and I want to take a relief from a hectic schedule, I was just going to a library and feel very relaxed.

✓ To be honest, I used to go to the library when I was a kid because at that time I had made a habit of reading books a lot. It was my habit when I was feeling stressed and wanted to take relief from a hectic schedule; I would just go to the library and feel very relaxed.

The phrase 'I was going to a library' is better expressed as 'I used to go to the library' to indicate habitual past action. 'I was made my habit' is incorrect; it should be 'I had made a habit'. 'It is my habit' should be 'It was my habit' to maintain past tense. 'I want to take a relief' should be 'I wanted to take relief' for tense consistency and correct article usage. 'I was just going to a library and feel very relaxed' should be 'I would just go to the library and feel very relaxed' to express habitual past action and maintain tense consistency.

× To be honest, I was going to a library when I was a kid because at that time I was made my habit of reading books a lot because it is my habit when I was feeling stressed and I want to take a relief from a hectic schedule, I was just going to a library and feel very relaxed.

✓ To be honest, I used to go to the library when I was a kid because at that time I had made a habit of reading books a lot. It was my habit when I was feeling stressed and wanted to take relief from a hectic schedule; I would just go to the library and feel very relaxed.

The article 'a' before 'library' is incorrect when referring to a specific place regularly visited; it should be 'the library'. Also, 'take a relief' is incorrect; 'relief' is an uncountable noun here and does not need an article.

× But to be honest, every people have their own quality in which they want to do in their life. Most most of the people want to do joking or some another exercise. Most of the people like to read books. So I think 5050 or maybe 45 or 50% people goes to a library or explore the different kinds of things in their life.

✓ But to be honest, every person has their own qualities that they want to pursue in their life. Most people want to joke or do some other exercise. Most people like to read books. So I think 50-50 or maybe 45 to 50% of people go to the library or explore different kinds of things in their life.

The phrase 'every people' is incorrect; 'every' is used with singular nouns, so it should be 'every person'. 'Their own quality' should be plural 'qualities' to match the context. 'Want to do joking' is incorrect; it should be 'want to joke'. 'Some another exercise' is incorrect; it should be 'some other exercise'. The percentage expression '5050 or maybe 45 or 50%' is unclear and corrected to '50-50 or maybe 45 to 50%'. 'People goes' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; it should be 'people go'. 'A library' should be 'the library' for specificity.