Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and a bit lengthy. Try to be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add a supporting detail or two. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases. Also, use correct grammar such as 'I don't get much time' instead of 'I don't get that much of time'.

例: I don't often go to the library nowadays because of my busy work schedule. However, I used to visit the library frequently during my school days, especially in standards 7 to 9, where I enjoyed reading various books.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence at the end. Try to complete your thoughts fully and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'different types of genres'—just say 'various genres'.

例: In the school library, I usually read books from various genres, but I especially enjoyed stories and literature. For example, the first time I read Gulliver's Travels, it was a very memorable experience for me.

提案: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by using better sentence structure and linking words to make it more coherent. Also, use past tense consistently when talking about the past. For example, say 'we had' instead of 'we do have'.

例: Yes, when I was in first standard, our school had a small library. It contained various kinds of books, including fiction, history, and literature. I especially enjoyed reading books about literature and paintings.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to answer the question directly first, then add relevant details. Avoid confusing phrases like 'he is speaking about my country'. Also, complete your sentences and avoid trailing off. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I am not sure about Chinese kids, but in India, many children often visit libraries. In the eastern part of India, where I come from, students frequently go to libraries to learn about our rich Bengali culture and heritage.

× I don't get that much of time to visit library.

✓ I don't get that much time to visit the library.

The phrase 'that much of time' is incorrect; it should be 'that much time'. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place known to both speaker and listener.

× when I do remember about my visiting to library was during my childhood days

✓ when I remember visiting the library was during my childhood days

The phrase 'do remember about my visiting' is awkward and incorrect. The correct form is 'remember visiting'. Also, 'to library' should be 'the library' with the definite article.

× We do have our library and that's all I remember.

✓ We did have our library and that's all I remember.

Since the speaker is referring to past time (childhood days), 'do have' should be changed to past tense 'did have'.

× I used to have different types of genres of books.

✓ I used to have different genres of books.

The phrase 'types of genres' is redundant; 'genres' alone suffices. Also, 'used to have' is correct for past habitual action.

× Mainly I liked the stories and the literature section.

✓ Mainly, I liked the stories and the literature section.

A comma after 'Mainly' improves sentence clarity.

× I still remember that the first time I read Gulliver's Travel, it was very good experience for me and.

✓ I still remember that the first time I read Gulliver's Travels, it was a very good experience for me.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly with 'and'. Also, the book title is 'Gulliver's Travels'. 'Very good experience' needs the article 'a' before it.

× we do have a library in the school.

✓ we did have a library in the school.

Since the speaker refers to past time ('during my first standard'), 'do have' should be 'did have'.

× It was a very small library. It has different kinds of books in it.

✓ It was a very small library. It had different kinds of books in it.

Past tense consistency requires 'has' to be changed to 'had'.

× The fiction section, there was history section, there were literature books, and many more.

✓ There was a fiction section, a history section, literature books, and many more.

The sentence structure is awkward. Adding 'There was' at the start and articles before 'fiction section' and 'history section' improves clarity and correctness.

× students are very much fond of library.

✓ students are very fond of the library.

'Very much fond' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'very fond'. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'.

× We used to visit there in order to have a brief view about the Bengali culture and our.

✓ We used to visit there in order to have a brief view of the Bengali culture and our heritage.

The correct preposition is 'view of' not 'view about'. The sentence is incomplete and needs completion for clarity.