Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use more natural phrasing and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, correct the grammar mistakes such as 'very busy schedule' to 'a very busy schedule' and 'I have to work 24 all the week' to 'I have to work 24 hours a day, all week'.

例: I rarely go to the library because I have a very busy schedule. I work long hours throughout the week and only have weekends to rest, so I don't have much time to visit the library.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to vary your vocabulary and avoid listing without connection. For example, use 'and' or 'as well as' to link activities and explain why you enjoy the atmosphere.

例: In the library, I usually read books and articles, as well as use online applications. I also enjoy the quiet and relaxed atmosphere because it helps me concentrate better.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains several grammatical errors and repetitions. Try to avoid repeating words and check verb tenses. Also, clarify your ideas with more precise vocabulary, for example, 'stimulate creativity' instead of 'keep help them creativity'.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library often when I was a child. My mother usually accompanied me because she believed that visiting the library was very important for a child's development and helped stimulate creativity.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical mistakes and hesitations. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and ensure subject-verb agreement, for example, 'children go' instead of 'children goes'. Also, use complete words such as 'creativity' instead of 'create'.

例: Yes, I think Chinese children go to the library quite often because their parents encourage them to do so. They believe that visiting the library is very important for their child's development and stimulates their creativity.

× Actually I rarely go to the library because I have very busy schedule.

✓ Actually I rarely go to the library because I have a very busy schedule.

The noun 'schedule' is singular and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× I have to work 24 all the week and I have just the the weekends to rest.

✓ I have to work 24 hours all week and I have just the weekends to rest.

The phrase '24 all the week' is incorrect; it should be '24 hours all week' to specify the time period correctly. Also, 'the the' is a typographical error and should be corrected to 'the'.

× So I rarely go to library.

✓ So I rarely go to the library.

The noun 'library' is a specific place here and requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× My mother always my mother accompanied me often to the library.

✓ My mother always accompanied me often to the library.

The phrase 'My mother always my mother' is repetitive; the second 'my mother' should be removed for clarity and correctness.

× She think she thought that going to library is a a very important for a child and it it keep help them creativity.

✓ She thought that going to the library is very important for a child and it helps keep their creativity.

The verb 'think' should be in past tense 'thought' to match the past context. The phrase 'going to library' requires the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'a a very important' has a duplicated article and should be 'very important'. The phrase 'it it keep help them creativity' is incorrect; it should be 'it helps keep their creativity' to use the correct verb form and possessive pronoun.

× Yes, I think Chinese children goes to go to the library quite often, uh, because their parents encourage them to go to the library.

✓ Yes, I think Chinese children go to the library quite often, uh, because their parents encourage them to go to the library.

The subject 'children' is plural and requires the plural verb form 'go' instead of 'goes'. The phrase 'goes to go' is redundant and incorrect.

× They believe that going to the library is very important for their child, uh, development and it stimulates their, uh, create.

✓ They believe that going to the library is very important for their child's development and it stimulates their creativity.

The phrase 'their child, uh, development' should be 'their child's development' to show possession. The word 'create' is a verb and should be replaced with the noun 'creativity' to fit the context.