Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct prepositions and improve sentence structure for naturalness. For example, say 'I usually go to the library when I need to focus and want a peaceful environment to study.' Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

例: I usually go to the library when I need to concentrate and prefer a quiet place to study.

提案: Avoid redundancy and improve coherence by using linking words. Also, correct grammar and sentence structure is important. For example, you can say, 'I usually study and sometimes read books. Additionally, when I feel stressed, I watch movies or read motivational books to relax.'

例: I usually study and sometimes read books. Moreover, when I feel stressed, I watch movies or read motivational books to feel better.

提案: Use past tense consistently and improve sentence clarity. For example, say 'No, I did not go to the library during my childhood because my parents did not allow me. They taught me at home, so I rarely visited the library then.'

例: No, I did not go to the library when I was a child because my parents preferred to teach me at home.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'I am not sure about Chinese kids, but in my country, children aged 15 or 16 often go to the library daily to prepare for competitive exams.'

例: I am not sure about Chinese children, but in my country, teenagers aged 15 or 16 usually visit the library daily to study for competitive exams.

× I usually go in library when I need to focus more and need more peace to study.

✓ I usually go to the library when I need to focus more and need more peace to study.

The correct preposition to use with 'go' and a place like 'library' is 'to', not 'in'. 'Go to the library' is the standard phrase in English.

× I usually study and sometime I read books on.

✓ I usually study and sometimes I read books.

The word 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'read books on' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'read books' without 'on'.

× Also I watch some movies when I feel stressed and depressed and I go there and read some motivational books and watch some movie.

✓ Also, I watch some movies when I feel stressed and depressed, and I go there to read some motivational books and watch some movies.

The phrase 'watch some movie' should be 'watch some movies' to match plural form. Also, adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× No, I'm not going anytime in my childhood at the library because my parents don't allow me to go there and they taught me at home.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library at all during my childhood because my parents didn't allow me to go there and they taught me at home.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'didn't go' and 'didn't allow' should be used instead of present tense. 'Anytime' is incorrect here; 'at all' is appropriate.

× That's why I don't go in my childhood in library.

✓ That's why I didn't go to the library during my childhood.

The phrase 'go in my childhood in library' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'to' for 'go to the library' and 'during my childhood' is the proper time expression.

× I don't know about any Chinese kids but according to my country and my previous in my country children's above 15 or 16 go in library in daily basis because they are try to crack some competitive exams and they practice there of that exam.

✓ I don't know about Chinese kids, but in my country, children above 15 or 16 go to the library on a daily basis because they try to crack some competitive exams and practice there for those exams.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'children's' should be 'children', 'go in library' should be 'go to the library', 'in daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis', 'they are try' should be 'they try', and 'practice there of that exam' should be 'practice there for those exams'. Also, pronouns and articles are corrected for clarity.