Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có nhiều từ ngữ không cần thiết như "like", "you know". Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp hơn, sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy cố gắng sử dụng từ vựng phong phú và chính xác hơn để thể hiện ý tưởng của bạn.

例: No, I don't often go to the library because I prefer studying at home where I can concentrate better. However, I sometimes visit the library when I need specific books or a quiet environment.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp lại từ và cụm từ như "like", "you know" và "urgent" nhiều lần. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp thông tin cụ thể hơn về hoạt động của bạn trong thư viện.

例: I usually go to the library only when I urgently need academic books that are not available in bookstores. In such cases, the library is very helpful for my research.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động đã xảy ra và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể. Tránh sử dụng các cụm từ không cần thiết và hoàn thiện câu cho rõ nghĩa.

例: If I remember correctly, I went to the library only once as a child to find a newly published book that I was interested in.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và tránh lặp từ như "like" nhiều lần. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc rõ ràng, sử dụng thì hiện tại đơn cho thói quen và cung cấp thông tin cụ thể hơn. Hãy tránh nói về bản thân không liên quan đến câu hỏi.

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but from what I know, they are very hardworking and often spend a lot of time studying, so they might visit the library frequently.

× I don't have much passions to about like going to the library.

✓ I don't have much passion for going to the library.

The phrase 'passions to about' is incorrect. The correct preposition to use with 'passion' is 'for'. Also, 'passion' is usually uncountable, so 'much passion' is correct instead of 'much passions'.

× I don't have much passions to about like going to the library.

✓ I don't have much passion for going to the library.

'Passions' is plural, but in this context, 'passion' is uncountable and should be singular. Therefore, 'much passion' is correct.

× I just really like want to stay at home and really focus on my studying.

✓ I just really want to stay at home and really focus on my studying.

The phrase 'like want' is incorrect. 'Like' is unnecessary here and should be removed to correct the sentence.

× I so I just go to the library in, you know, like in a urgent, urgent case, like when I want to find a really like academic book or you know, like some books is not available from the bookstore.

✓ So I just go to the library in urgent cases, like when I want to find a really academic book or when some books are not available from the bookstore.

The sentence is awkward and contains redundancy. 'In a urgent, urgent case' should be 'in urgent cases'. Also, 'some books is' should be 'some books are' to agree in number.

× some books is not available from the bookstore.

✓ some books are not available from the bookstore.

The subject 'books' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.

× If my memory serves me right, just one time that I went to the library and that was the time that I want to find like the new book that published in just A and.

✓ If my memory serves me right, I went to the library just one time, and that was when I wanted to find a new book that was published in January.

The verb 'want' should be in past tense 'wanted' to match the past context. Also, 'that published' should be 'that was published' to form the correct passive past tense. 'Just A and' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; assuming 'January' as a plausible correction.

× If my memory serves me right, just one time that I went to the library and that was the time that I want to find like the new book that published in just A and.

✓ If my memory serves me right, I went to the library just one time, and that was when I wanted to find a new book that was published in January.

The sentence structure is awkward and the pronoun usage is unclear. Rephrasing improves clarity and correctness.

× for my like for what I know Chinese kids is like they are really, really, really like focus on the study and they really always hard working.

✓ From what I know, Chinese kids are really, really focused on their studies and they are always hardworking.

The phrase 'for my like for what I know' is incorrect and redundant. 'Focus on the study' should be 'focused on their studies'. 'Hard working' should be 'hardworking' as one word. Also, subject-verb agreement corrected from 'kids is' to 'kids are'.

× Chinese kids is like they are really, really, really like focus on the study and they really always hard working.

✓ Chinese kids are really, really focused on their studies and they are always hardworking.

The subject 'kids' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.