Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and make your answer more concise and natural. Also, provide a bit more detail to enrich your response, for example, mention what types of books you enjoy or how often you visit.

例: Yes, I often visit the library because I enjoy reading novels and it helps me relax after a busy day.

提案: Avoid repetition such as 'really really' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about the kind of work you do.

例: I usually select books that interest me and then start my studies, which helps me concentrate better.

提案: The sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Make sure to answer directly and clearly, using past tense appropriately. Avoid starting sentences with 'And now' when referring to the past.

例: I didn't go to the library when I was a child because my hometown was a small countryside without a library.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure, for example, 'many Chinese kids go to the library nowadays.' Use linking words to compare past and present clearly. Avoid redundancy and be more precise.

例: I believe many Chinese children go to the library nowadays, but in the past, libraries were less common, so children rarely visited them.

× I usually choose some of the books that I I'm interested to read and then I started my work which could really really help me to focus.

✓ I usually choose some of the books that I am interested in reading and then I start my work which can really help me to focus.

The phrase 'interested to read' is incorrect; the correct form is 'interested in reading' because 'interested' is followed by the preposition 'in' and a gerund (-ing form). Also, 'I started' should be 'I start' to maintain present tense consistency with 'usually choose'. 'Could really really help' is better as 'can really help' to express general ability or possibility in the present.

× And now I'd rather go to the library when I was a kid because my hometown was a small countryside and there was no library there.

✓ I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because my hometown was a small countryside and there was no library there.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I'd rather go' (would rather) with a past time reference 'when I was a kid', which is illogical. The correct expression is to state the past fact directly using past tense: 'I didn't go to the library when I was a kid'. Also, 'small countryside' is acceptable but 'small rural area' might be more natural.

× I believe nowadays many of Chinese case all go to the library, but in the past there were not so many libraries as much as today.

✓ I believe nowadays many Chinese kids all go to the library, but in the past there were not as many libraries as today.

The phrase 'many of Chinese case all' is incorrect. It should be 'many Chinese kids' to correctly use the plural noun 'kids' without 'of'. Also, 'not so many libraries as much as today' is redundant; the correct comparative form is 'not as many libraries as today'.

× So in the past children rarely go to the library.

✓ So in the past children rarely went to the library.

The sentence refers to a past time ('in the past') but uses the present tense verb 'go'. The verb should be in the past tense 'went' to match the time reference.