Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'try on three times a week' không phù hợp và câu hơi dài, nên chia nhỏ câu để tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, I usually go to the library about three times a week. It provides a quiet environment that helps me concentrate on my studies.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'there are a quiet place' sai về số nhiều, và câu hơi lặp lại ý. Nên dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: I usually study in the library because it is a quiet place where I can focus better, which helps me study more efficiently.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp, bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và dùng thì quá khứ đúng, tránh lặp từ và hoàn thiện câu.

例: When I was a kid, I rarely went to the library because I lived far from the city center and my parents only allowed me to go occasionally.

提案: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng, có lỗi phát âm và từ vựng không phù hợp ('overhaul the'), bạn nên trả lời thẳng vào câu hỏi và dùng từ chính xác hơn.

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids specifically, but I believe children all over the world have the opportunity to visit libraries.

× Yes, I usually go to the library try on three times a week to study because that place provide me a quiet place to help me focus on my study.

✓ Yes, I usually go to the library three times a week to study because that place provides me a quiet place to help me focus on my study.

The phrase 'try on' is incorrectly used here; it should be removed as it does not fit the context. Also, 'provide' should be 'provides' to agree with the singular subject 'that place'.

× Yes, I usually go to the library try on three times a week to study because that place provide me a quiet place to help me focus on my study.

✓ Yes, I usually go to the library three times a week to study because that place provides me a quiet place to help me focus on my study.

The verb 'provide' must be in the third person singular form 'provides' to agree with the singular subject 'that place'.

× I usually go to library to study because there are a quiet place that I I'm can focus on my study and helps me study more efficiently.

✓ I usually go to the library to study because there is a quiet place where I can focus on my study and it helps me study more efficiently.

The article 'the' is missing before 'library'. Also, 'there are a quiet place' is incorrect; it should be 'there is a quiet place' because 'place' is singular. The phrase 'that I I'm can' is incorrect and should be 'where I can'. Additionally, 'helps me' needs a subject 'it' to be correct.

× I usually go to library to study because there are a quiet place that I I'm can focus on my study and helps me study more efficiently.

✓ I usually go to the library to study because there is a quiet place where I can focus on my study and it helps me study more efficiently.

Use 'there is' for singular noun 'a quiet place' instead of 'there are'.

× I usually go to library to study because there are a quiet place that I I'm can focus on my study and helps me study more efficiently.

✓ I usually go to the library to study because there is a quiet place where I can focus on my study and it helps me study more efficiently.

The phrase 'that I I'm can' is incorrect; it should be 'where I can' to correctly connect the clause and use the pronoun properly. Also, 'helps me' needs the subject 'it' to be grammatically correct.

× Because I live far from the center, so when I was a kid I just go to the library when my parents, my parents allow me go to go to the.

✓ Because I lived far from the center, when I was a kid I just went to the library when my parents allowed me to go.

The verbs 'live', 'go', and 'allow' should be in the past tense 'lived', 'went', and 'allowed' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was a kid'. The phrase 'go to go to the' is redundant and incomplete, so it is corrected to 'allowed me to go'. The conjunction 'so' is unnecessary after 'because' and is removed.

× Because I live far from the center, so when I was a kid I just go to the library when my parents, my parents allow me go to go to the.

✓ Because I lived far from the center, when I was a kid I just went to the library when my parents allowed me to go.

Using both 'because' and 'so' together is redundant and incorrect. One should be removed to maintain proper sentence structure.

× Because I live far from the center, so when I was a kid I just go to the library when my parents, my parents allow me go to go to the.

✓ Because I lived far from the center, when I was a kid I just went to the library when my parents allowed me to go.

The repetition of 'my parents' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow; it should be mentioned once. Also, 'allow me go' should be 'allowed me to go' to be grammatically correct.

× Actually, I don't know about about that, but I think children overhaul the in the whole world and have the right to go to the library. Yeah.

✓ Actually, I don't know about that, but I think children all over the world have the right to go to the library.

The phrase 'children overhaul the in the whole world' is incorrect. It should be 'children all over the world'. The repeated word 'about' is a typo and should be corrected. The word 'Yeah' is informal and can be omitted for clarity.