Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: သင်၏အဖြေတွင် သဘာဝကျပြီး ထိရောက်မှုရှိရန် စကားလုံးများကို သေချာရွေးချယ်ပြီး စကားလုံးများကို မထပ်ခါတလဲလဲ မပြောရန်လိုအပ်သည်။ "I'm really go to the library" ဆိုသော စကားလုံးသည် မှားနေပြီး "I don't often go to the library" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်သင့်သည်။ ထို့အပြင် "Anyhow" ကို မလိုအပ်ပါ။ သင်၏အဖြေကို ပိုမိုသေချာဖော်ပြရန် "because" နှင့် "so" ကဲ့သို့သော ဆက်စပ်စကားလုံးများကို အသုံးပြုပါ။

例: I don't often go to the library because I find it more comfortable to study at home. However, sometimes I visit the library to access online research materials and to enjoy a peaceful environment without distractions.

提案: အဖြေတွင် သင်၏လုပ်ဆောင်ချက်များကို ပိုမိုရှင်းလင်းစွာ ဖော်ပြရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ "made a some kind of book" ဆိုသည်မှာ မှားနေပြီး "borrow books" သို့မဟုတ် "read books" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်သင့်သည်။ ဆက်စပ်စကားလုံးများကို သုံးပြီး အကြောင်းအရာများကို ပိုမိုတိကျစွာ ဖော်ပြပါ။

例: Usually, I borrow books related to my studies that I cannot easily find online. Additionally, I sometimes join study groups to collaborate and attend workshops, which help me improve my understanding and environmental knowledge for my project.

提案: အဖြေတွင် သင်၏အတွေ့အကြုံကို ပိုမိုသေချာဖော်ပြရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ "Instead of that" ကို "Instead" သို့မဟုတ် "Instead of going to the library" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်ပါ။ သင်၏အကြောင်းအရာများကို ပိုမိုတိကျစွာ ဖော်ပြရန် "planted a steady resource" ဆိုသော စကားလုံးကို ရိုးရှင်းပြီး သေချာသော စကားလုံးများဖြင့် ပြောင်းလဲပါ။

例: I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because there wasn't one nearby. Instead, my father bought hundreds of books for me and my brother, which provided us with a steady source of reading materials at home.

提案: အဖြေတွင် သင်၏အကြောင်းအရာများကို ပိုမိုသေချာစွာ ဖော်ပြရန် လိုအပ်သည်။ "reservoir places for studied" ဆိုသော စကားလုံးများသည် မှားနေပြီး "a place for studying" ဟု ပြင်ဆင်သင့်သည်။ ဆက်စပ်စကားလုံးများကို သုံးပြီး စကားလုံးများကို ပိုမိုသေချာစွာ ချိတ်ဆက်ပါ။

例: In the past, Chinese kids preferred going to the library because it was a place for enjoyment and studying. However, nowadays, they prefer using online libraries and digital devices for their studies instead of visiting physical libraries.

× I'm really go to the library because I find it more comfortable to study at home.

✓ I don't really go to the library because I find it more comfortable to study at home.

The original sentence uses 'I'm really go' which is incorrect. The correct form is 'I don't really go' to express the negative present tense. The verb 'go' should be preceded by 'do' in negative present tense sentences.

× Anyhow, sometimes I may go to the library for my research study that I can access online and to find my peaceful mind without distraction.

✓ Anyhow, sometimes I may go to the library for my research study that I cannot access online and to find peace of mind without distraction.

The modal verb 'may' is acceptable here, but 'can' should be changed to 'cannot' to express inability to access online. Also, 'peaceful mind' is better expressed as 'peace of mind'.

× Normally I made a some kind of book that related to my study of which I can't easily access online.

✓ Normally I make some kind of book that is related to my study which I can't easily access online.

The verb 'made' is past tense but the context suggests habitual action, so present tense 'make' is appropriate. Also, 'a some kind of book' is incorrect; 'some kind of book' is correct. 'Related' should be 'is related' to agree with 'book'.

× Anyhow, sometimes I may try and do the study group to collaborate their workshop to improve my understanding and environmental knowledge about my study project.

✓ Anyhow, sometimes I try to join study groups to collaborate in their workshops to improve my understanding and environmental knowledge about my study project.

'May try and do' is awkward; 'try to join' is clearer. 'Study group' should be plural 'study groups' to match 'workshops'. 'Collaborate their workshop' is incorrect; it should be 'collaborate in their workshops'.

× They have planted a steady resource for us when we was a kid at home.

✓ They provided a steady resource for us when we were kids at home.

'Have planted' is present perfect, but the action is in the past, so simple past 'provided' is better. 'We was' is incorrect; it should be 'we were' for plural subject. 'A kid' should be 'kids' to match 'we'.

× In the past, Chinese kids they prefer to go to the library because library is a place to search for enjoyment, reservoir places for studied.

✓ In the past, Chinese kids preferred to go to the library because the library was a place to search for enjoyment and a resource place for study.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'Chinese kids'. 'Prefer' should be past tense 'preferred' to match 'in the past'. 'Library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Reservoir places for studied' is incorrect; it should be 'a resource place for study'.

× Nowadays they prefer online library and digital equipment for the study instead of going to the actual place.

✓ Nowadays, they prefer online libraries and digital equipment for studying instead of going to the actual place.

'Online library' should be plural 'online libraries' to generalize. 'For the study' is awkward; 'for studying' is better. Added comma after 'Nowadays' for clarity.