Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит повторения и некоторые грамматические ошибки, например, "it's it's" и "at this type of places". Постарайтесь избегать повторов и использовать более точные выражения. Также ответ можно сделать более связным, используя связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books. It is a quiet place, which makes it ideal for concentrating. Moreover, I find it very pleasant to spend time there.

提案: В вашем ответе есть повторы и нечеткие формулировки, например, "In in library" и "literature, literature books". Используйте связующие слова, чтобы сделать ответ более логичным, и избегайте повторов. Также старайтесь давать более конкретные детали о том, что именно вы читаете и как готовитесь к проектам.

例: Usually, I read classic literature books in the library. Besides reading, I prepare presentations and work on group projects there. Therefore, the library is a productive place for me.

提案: Ответ содержит противоречия и грамматические ошибки, например, "it was really disgusting to read books" и "it it's too boring". Постарайтесь выражать свои мысли ясно и последовательно, избегая противоречий. Используйте простые и правильные конструкции, чтобы описать свои чувства в детстве и сейчас.

例: When I was a child, I did not like reading books because I found it boring. However, now I enjoy going to the library and reading because it helps me relax and learn new things.

提案: Ваш ответ звучит неестественно и немного грубо, особенно фраза "I don't really care about Chinese kids". Постарайтесь отвечать более нейтрально и уважительно. Также используйте связующие слова для логичности и конкретизируйте свои мысли.

例: I believe that many Chinese children often visit libraries because reading is an important part of their education. It seems to be a common habit among them to read books regularly.

× I like the library because of it's quietness and it's it's a real pleasure to be at this type of places.

✓ I like the library because of its quietness and it's a real pleasure to be at this type of place.

The pronoun 'it's' is a contraction for 'it is' or 'it has', but here the possessive pronoun 'its' is needed to show ownership. Also, 'places' should be singular 'place' to match 'this type'.

× I like the library because of it's quietness and it's it's a real pleasure to be at this type of places.

✓ I like the library because of its quietness and it's a real pleasure to be at this type of place.

The phrase 'this type of places' is incorrect because 'this type' refers to a singular category, so the noun following it should be singular: 'place'.

× But also you can do.

✓ But you can also do other things there.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'other things there' completes the thought and improves sentence structure.

× In in library I usually read some kind of books like classic books, literature, literature books.

✓ In the library, I usually read some kinds of books like classic books and literature books.

The preposition 'in' should be followed by the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'some kind of books' should be pluralized to 'some kinds of books' to match the plural noun 'books'.

× Besides this I also prepare for my for my presentations and prepare a group project.

✓ Besides this, I also prepare for my presentations and work on a group project.

The phrase 'prepare a group project' is awkward; 'work on a group project' is more natural. Also, a comma after 'Besides this' improves readability.

× Also study a lot at this place.

✓ I also study a lot at this place.

The original sentence lacks a subject, making it incomplete. Adding 'I' completes the sentence.

× I don't know those things.

✓ I don't remember those things.

The phrase 'I don't know those things' is unnatural in this context; 'I don't remember those things' better expresses the intended meaning.

× That reading book was very interesting for me when I was a young child, but and it was really disgusting to read books.

✓ Reading books was very interesting for me when I was a young child, but sometimes it was really boring to read books.

'That reading book' is incorrect; 'Reading books' is the correct subject. Also, 'disgusting' is inappropriate here; 'boring' fits better. The conjunction 'but and' is incorrect; 'but sometimes' is better.

× It seemed that it it's too boring for me.

✓ It seemed that it was too boring for me.

The phrase 'it it's' is incorrect; 'it was' is the correct past tense form.

× But now I'm not like that.

✓ But now I'm not like that anymore.

Adding 'anymore' clarifies the change from past to present state.

× I really go to the library for reading books and enjoying the time that I'm having.

✓ I really go to the library to read books and enjoy the time that I'm having.

After 'go to' the infinitive form 'to read' and 'to enjoy' is correct, not the gerund form.

× To be honest, I don't really care about Chinese kids, but I can see that they are very intelligent and clever, so I can easily say that they probably go to the library a lot and read books regularly.

✓ To be honest, I don't really know about Chinese kids, but I can see that they are very intelligent and clever, so I can easily say that they probably go to the library a lot and read books regularly.

The phrase 'I don't really care about Chinese kids' is inappropriate here; 'I don't really know about Chinese kids' fits better the intended meaning.

× It seems that it's their habit.

✓ It seems that this is their habit.

Using 'this is' instead of 'it's' clarifies the subject and improves sentence clarity.