Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because it has thousands of books that help me gather information for my research projects. It is a great place to gain new knowledge and complete my assignments efficiently.

提案: Your answer repeats phrases and lacks clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words like 'and' or 'sometimes'. Try to avoid repetition and keep your answer natural and concise.

例: I usually borrow books from the library, and sometimes I spend several hours reading there. This is very convenient for me because I can focus without distractions.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Make sure to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details. Use simple linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons.

例: Yes, I often went to the library when I was a kid because I was curious and wanted to learn new things. It was a quiet place where I could read and ask questions.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Start with a clear opinion, then support it with specific information using linking words like 'according to'. Avoid repeating words and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library. According to an economic survey in China, many people visit libraries regularly to conduct research and study.

× Yes, I often go to the library to get my research a complete or for my information gathering where we can find a lot of thousands of books in the libraries, which is to get a new knowledge and fulfill my project.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library to complete my research or for my information gathering where we can find thousands of books in the library, which helps me gain new knowledge and fulfill my project.

The phrase 'a complete' is incorrect; it should be 'complete' as a verb here. 'A lot of thousands of books' is redundant; 'thousands of books' is sufficient. 'Libraries' should be singular 'library' to match the context. 'A new knowledge' is incorrect because 'knowledge' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. The sentence is corrected to improve singular/plural agreement and article usage.

× I usually go there and borrow the books from there and sometimes I sit there and read for hours, hours of days, which is, which is very, which is very convenient for me.

✓ I usually go there and borrow books, and sometimes I sit there and read for hours, which is very convenient for me.

'The books' is changed to 'books' because it refers to books in general, not specific ones. 'Hours of days' is incorrect and redundant; 'for hours' suffices. Repetition of 'which is very' is removed for clarity and correctness.

× When I watch the Kita, I often go to library because it is a place where I I can fulfill my curiosity that I apologize. In the childhood I was very much so I can ask the people, so I did.

✓ When I was a kid, I often went to the library because it was a place where I could fulfill my curiosity. In my childhood, I was very curious, so I could ask people, and I did.

The sentence uses present tense 'watch' and 'go' incorrectly for past events; corrected to past tense 'was' and 'went'. 'Kita' is corrected to 'kid'. 'I apologize' is irrelevant and removed. 'In the childhood' corrected to 'In my childhood'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense usage.

× According to the offer Economic Survey in China, I have look at it and it shows that Chinese people often go to the library for the research research people.

✓ According to the official Economic Survey in China, I have looked at it and it shows that Chinese people often go to the library for research purposes.

'Offer' is corrected to 'official'. 'I have look' is corrected to 'I have looked' for correct verb form. 'For the research research people' is unclear and corrected to 'for research purposes' to convey the intended meaning. Prepositions and word choice are corrected for clarity and correctness.