Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が少し不自然で、繰り返しや文法の誤りがあります。より自然で効果的な表現を使い、理由を明確に述べることが重要です。例えば、"I don't often go to the library because I am busy with dancing, which I really enjoy because it makes me happy."のように簡潔にまとめましょう。

例: I don't often go to the library because I am busy with dancing, which I really enjoy because it makes me happy.

提案: 文法の誤りと冗長な表現があります。より自然な英語で、論理的に繋がる文を作ることが必要です。例えば、"I usually study at the library because I can concentrate better there than at home."のように簡潔に述べましょう。

例: I usually study at the library because I can concentrate better there than at home.

提案: 文法ミスと不自然な表現があります。具体的な例を述べるのは良いですが、文を正しく構成し、自然な表現にしましょう。例えば、"I used to go to the library to read books. I especially loved reading fiction because it excited me."のように表現できます。

例: I used to go to the library to read books. I especially loved reading fiction because it excited me.

提案: 答えが繰り返しで冗長です。知らない場合でも、簡潔に伝え、会話を続けるための表現を使うと良いでしょう。例えば、"I'm not sure about Chinese kids, as I am Japanese and not familiar with their culture."のように述べましょう。

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, as I am Japanese and not familiar with their culture.

× I don't often go to the library because I am busy dancing.

✓ I don't often go to the library because I am busy dancing.

This sentence is correct. 'Busy dancing' correctly uses the verb + -ing form to indicate an ongoing activity.

× I love dancing because I it makes me happy, so I love it.

✓ I love dancing because it makes me happy, so I love it.

The pronoun 'I it' is incorrect. The correct pronoun to refer to 'dancing' is 'it'. Remove the extra 'I' to correct the sentence.

× I usually study in the library or university.

✓ I usually study in the library or at the university.

The preposition 'at' is needed before 'the university' to indicate location. 'In' is correct for 'the library', but 'at' is more appropriate for 'the university'.

× I spend I can consent more concentrate to study than in my home.

✓ I can concentrate more on studying than at my home.

The original sentence has pronoun and word choice errors. 'I spend I can consent more concentrate' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'I can concentrate more on studying'. Also, 'at my home' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× So I go to the library and I study.

✓ So I go to the library and study.

The sentence is grammatically correct but can be improved by omitting the repeated subject 'I' for smoother flow.

× I loved read reading a fiction books it was makes me excited.

✓ I loved reading fiction books; it made me excited.

The verb 'read' should be in the gerund form 'reading' after 'loved'. 'A fiction books' is incorrect; 'fiction books' is plural without 'a'. 'It was makes me excited' mixes tenses; correct past tense is 'it made me excited'.

× I don't know that Chinese kids often go to the library because I am a Japanese, so I don't know Chinese culture, so I don't know it.

✓ I don't know if Chinese kids often go to the library because I am Japanese, so I don't know Chinese culture.

'That' should be 'if' to introduce an indirect question. 'I am a Japanese' should be 'I am Japanese' (no article). The last 'so I don't know it' is redundant and can be omitted.