Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tự nhiên hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ví dụ, hãy nói "I don't often go to the library because I find it more convenient to research information online. Also, there isn't a library near my home."

例: I don't often go to the library because I find it more convenient to research information online. Also, there isn't a library near my home, so I usually use the Internet to find what I need.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói "I usually go to the library when I have exams or need information that is not available online. There, I search books and consult librarians for specific help."

例: I usually go to the library when I have exams or need information that is not available online. There, I search books and consult librarians for specific help.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp. Bạn nên nói "No, I didn't go to the library much as a kid because I preferred outdoor activities like playing sports. Also, my family had a large collection of books at home, so I didn't feel the need to visit the library."

例: No, I didn't go to the library much as a kid because I preferred outdoor activities like playing sports. Also, my family had a large collection of books at home, so I didn't feel the need to visit the library.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trúc rõ ràng hơn. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói "In my opinion, with the development of technology, children prefer watching videos or reading books online. Parents rarely take them to the library because many kids find reading books boring."

例: In my opinion, with the development of technology, children prefer watching videos or reading books online. Parents rarely take them to the library because many kids find reading books boring.

× No, I'm not a person that visits library regularly because I find that I'm researching the information through online is more convenient.

✓ No, I'm not a person that visits the library regularly because I find that researching information online is more convenient.

The noun 'library' is countable and singular here, so it requires the definite article 'the' to specify the particular library context. Also, 'researching the information through online' is incorrect; 'researching information online' is the correct phrase without 'the' and 'through'.

× I'm researching the information through online is more convenient.

✓ researching information online is more convenient.

The preposition 'through' is not used with 'online' in this context. The correct phrase is 'researching information online'.

× there's no available library nears my place.

✓ there's no available library near my place.

The word 'library' is singular and countable, so 'no available library' is correct, but 'nears' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'near' without 's'.

× there's no available library nears my place.

✓ there's no available library near my place.

The preposition 'nears' is incorrect; 'near' is the correct preposition to indicate proximity.

× I find it more efficiently for me.

✓ I find it more efficient for me.

The word 'efficiently' is an adverb, but here an adjective 'efficient' is needed to describe 'it'.

× If I just mentioned before that I'm not busy regularly, but when I have an exam or research that the information on the Internet is limited, then I will go to the library to searching for the information through the books and I also have consult with the librarians to help me to search for the specific.

✓ As I just mentioned before, I'm not busy regularly, but when I have an exam or when the information on the Internet is limited, I go to the library to search for information in books, and I also consult with librarians to help me find specific information.

The original sentence has multiple issues: incorrect conjunctions, verb forms, and sentence structure. 'If' is incorrectly used; 'As' or 'As I just mentioned' is better. 'to searching' should be 'to search'. 'have consult' should be 'consult'. Also, 'the specific' is incomplete; 'specific information' is correct.

× I will go to the library to searching for the information through the books

✓ I will go to the library to search for information in books

After 'to' (infinitive marker), the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. So 'to searching' is incorrect; it should be 'to search'.

× searching for the information through the books

✓ searching for information in books

The preposition 'through' is not appropriate here; 'in books' is the correct phrase to indicate the source.

× I also have consult with the librarians to help me to search for the specific.

✓ I also consult with the librarians to help me find specific information.

'Have consult' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'consult'. Also, 'to help me to search for the specific' is awkward; 'help me find specific information' is clearer.

× Actually no, because when I was a kid I was a kind of kiss that fun up outdoor activity like play sports and sometimes that I find reading books is quite boring for me so I'm not often go to the library and my family also have a large huge book safe for me to read, so I don't think that I need.

✓ Actually no, because when I was a kid I was the kind of kid that enjoyed outdoor activities like playing sports, and sometimes I found reading books quite boring, so I didn't often go to the library. My family also had a large bookcase full of books for me to read, so I didn't think I needed to go.

Multiple errors: 'kiss' should be 'kid'; 'fun up' is incorrect, should be 'enjoyed'; 'play sports' should be 'playing sports'; 'sometimes that I find' should be 'sometimes I found'; 'I'm not often go' should be 'I didn't often go'; 'my family also have' should be 'my family also had'; 'large huge book safe' should be 'large bookcase full of books'; 'I don't think that I need' should be 'I didn't think I needed'.

× I was a kind of kiss that fun up outdoor activity like play sports

✓ I was the kind of kid that enjoyed outdoor activities like playing sports

'kiss' is a typo for 'kid'; 'fun up' is incorrect, should be 'enjoyed'; 'play sports' should be 'playing sports' to match the gerund form after 'like'.

× sometimes that I find reading books is quite boring for me

✓ sometimes I found reading books quite boring

The sentence refers to past time ('when I was a kid'), so the verb should be in past tense: 'found' instead of 'find'.

× my family also have a large huge book safe for me to read

✓ my family also had a large bookcase full of books for me to read

'family' is singular, so the verb should be 'had' not 'have'. 'book safe' is incorrect; the correct term is 'bookcase'. 'large huge' is redundant; use one adjective.

× my family also have a large huge book safe for me to read

✓ my family also had a large bookcase full of books for me to read

The phrase 'book safe' is incorrect; 'bookcase' is the correct noun. Also, 'full of books' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× so I don't think that I need.

✓ so I didn't think I needed to go.

The sentence refers to past time, so 'don't think' should be 'didn't think', and 'I need' should be 'I needed to go' to complete the meaning.

× In my opinion, weather developed of technology today, kids are more keen on watching the information or reading books online through the animations.

✓ In my opinion, with the development of technology today, kids are more keen on watching information or reading books online through animations.

'weather developed of technology' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'with the development of technology'. 'the information' should be 'information' without 'the'. 'through the animations' should be 'through animations'.

× kids are more keen on watching the information or reading books online through the animations.

✓ kids are more keen on watching information or reading books online through animations.

'the information' and 'the animations' are incorrect here because they refer to general concepts, so the definite article 'the' should be omitted.

× parents also don't take them to the library anymore because some kids find that reading books is quite boring for them.

✓ parents also don't take them to the library anymore because some kids find reading books quite boring.

'find that reading books is quite boring for them' is wordy; 'find reading books quite boring' is more natural and concise.

× So I think that they just read it online.

✓ So I think that they just read online.

The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and unclear here; 'read online' is sufficient.