Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with clear reasons and avoid redundancy. Use simple and correct sentences to express your ideas naturally.

例: Yes, I occasionally go to the library to read stories and find resources. It helps me gain a lot of information and improve my knowledge.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Focus on directly answering the question with clear and relevant details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: In the library, I usually borrow science books for my father's studies. This also helps me learn more and stay ahead in my classes.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is incomplete. Try to use correct tenses and complete your thoughts. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

例: No, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because I preferred playing games like other children. However, when I started going, I realized the importance of studying.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and somewhat off-topic. Try to focus on the question and provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library because education is highly valued in China. This hard work contributes to the country's rapid development and success in manufacturing.

× Yes, I occasionally go to the library for story and resource purposes.

✓ Yes, I occasionally go to the library for story and resource purposes.

No correction needed as the sentence is grammatically acceptable in this context.

× It takes to give many information fill our knowledge.

✓ It helps to provide a lot of information to fill our knowledge.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'It takes to give many information fill our knowledge' is incorrect in structure and word choice. The corrected sentence uses 'helps to provide' to express purpose and 'a lot of information' as the correct quantifier. Also, 'fill our knowledge' is better expressed as 'to fill our knowledge' or 'to enhance our knowledge.'

× I usually return some books like a science related subject et cetera which is for my father study knowledge and makes me ahead of all the student.

✓ I usually return some books on science-related subjects, etc., which are for my father's study and help me stay ahead of all the students.

The original sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'a science related subject' should be plural 'science-related subjects' because 'some books' implies multiple subjects. 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with plural 'subjects.' 'my father study knowledge' should be 'my father's study.' 'makes me ahead of all the student' should be 'help me stay ahead of all the students' for subject-verb agreement and correct plural form.

× No, when I was a kid I usually don't go to library because in case I like, I'm very much interested in playing games like other child and don't like to study.

✓ No, when I was a kid I usually didn't go to the library because I was very interested in playing games like other children and didn't like to study.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'don't go' should be 'didn't go' to match past time frame. 'go to library' needs the article 'the library.' 'like other child' should be 'like other children' for plural. 'don't like' should be 'didn't like' to maintain past tense consistency.

× And when I start going I knew the importance of the.

✓ And when I started going, I knew the importance of it.

'start' should be in past tense 'started' to match 'knew.' The sentence is incomplete; 'the' should be followed by a noun or replaced with 'it' to refer to the library. Added comma for clarity.

× Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library.

✓ Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct.

× As we know, the Chinese people are very much hard working as we can see the rapid development of of a country country and and a biggest manufacturing of of the world.

✓ As we know, the Chinese people are very hardworking, as we can see the rapid development of the country and its position as the biggest manufacturer in the world.

The original sentence has repeated words ('of of,' 'country country,' 'and and') which are errors. 'very much hard working' should be 'very hardworking.' 'a biggest manufacturing' is incorrect; 'the biggest manufacturer' is correct. Also, 'of the world' is better expressed as 'in the world.'