Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và sắp xếp ý rõ ràng hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I often go to the library on weekends to find books related to my courses and to look up information in dictionaries, which helps me study better.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như "uh". Ngoài ra, hãy dùng liên từ để kết nối các ý và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: In the library, I usually look up information in dictionaries to help with my studies, and I enjoy reading storybooks or literature because the quiet atmosphere helps me relax.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Hãy sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng cách và tránh lặp từ. Thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I didn't go often, but I remember visiting the library for the first time when I was four years old. At that time, I couldn't read well, so it was hard for me to understand the stories and learn difficult words.

提案: Bạn nên tránh hỏi lại câu hỏi của giám khảo và trả lời trực tiếp. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý ngữ pháp số nhiều, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: I'm not sure about Chinese kids, but I believe most children visit the library at least occasionally because it provides a quiet and comfortable place to study and learn.

× I go to the library at the weekend at my school to find some books in my course and to research some information in the dictionary to provide knowledge and help me in studying.

✓ I go to the library at the weekend at my school to find some books for my courses and to research some information in dictionaries to gain knowledge and help me study.

The word 'course' should be plural 'courses' because it refers to multiple subjects. 'Dictionary' should be plural 'dictionaries' because there are usually many dictionaries. 'Help me in studying' is better expressed as 'help me study' for natural English.

× I usually research some information in the dictionaries to help me studying and gain knowledge from stories books or literature books uh, and I can have uh relaxed atmosphere to effect.

✓ I usually research some information in dictionaries to help me study and gain knowledge from story books or literature books, and I can have a relaxed atmosphere to focus.

After 'help me', the base form 'study' is used, not the '-ing' form. 'Stories books' should be 'story books'. 'Relaxed atmosphere to effect' is unclear; 'to focus' or 'to concentrate' fits better.

× I remember that the first day I went to a library when it was 4 years old and at that time I I don't know, I didn't know how to read some words.

✓ I remember that the first day I went to a library was when I was 4 years old, and at that time I didn't know how to read some words.

The phrase 'when it was 4 years old' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was 4 years old'. Also, 'I don't know' is present tense and should be removed or replaced with past tense 'I didn't know'.

× It's hard to me to understand the plot of the stories and learn some very difficult words.

✓ It's hard for me to understand the plot of the stories and learn some very difficult words.

The correct preposition after 'hard' in this context is 'for', not 'to'.

× I don't know much information about Chinese kid.

✓ I don't know much information about Chinese kids.

'Kid' should be plural 'kids' because it refers to children in general.

× But I think that everyone have been going to the library once a time because they need to learn, they need to study, and they need to have a relaxing and comfortable atmosphere to be learning good.

✓ But I think that everyone has been going to the library at least once because they need to learn, they need to study, and they need to have a relaxing and comfortable atmosphere to learn well.

'Everyone' is singular and requires 'has' not 'have'. 'Once a time' is incorrect; 'at least once' or 'one time' is better. 'To be learning good' is incorrect; 'to learn well' is the correct form.