Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. For example, say "I enjoy reading historic books" instead of "enjoy read historic books." Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, I often go to the library with my family and cousins. I enjoy reading historic books there because they are very interesting.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. For example, instead of "the the new book with which I get it," say "a new book I borrow from the library." Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Usually, I get a coffee from the coffee shop and then enjoy reading a new book that I borrow from the library.

提案: Use past tense consistently and avoid awkward phrases. For example, say "I usually went with my school and friends about 10 years ago." Also, avoid unclear expressions like "complete this journey in the next life."

例: Yes, I usually went to the library with my school and friends about 10 years ago. I really enjoyed those visits and hope to continue going to libraries in the future.

提案: Try to give a more direct answer and use clearer expressions. For example, say "I am not sure about Chinese kids, but I believe many of them visit libraries with their schools." Avoid vague phrases like "schools journeys."

例: I am not sure about Chinese kids specifically, but I think many children visit libraries with their schools for educational trips.

× I like reading books and enjoy read historic books.

✓ I like reading books and enjoy reading historic books.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by a verb in the '-ing' form, so 'read' should be corrected to 'reading'.

× I usually take my coffee from the coffee shop and enjoy reading the the new book with which I get it from the library.

✓ I usually take my coffee from the coffee shop and enjoy reading the new book that I get from the library.

The phrase 'the the' is a repetition error; also, 'with which I get it' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'that I get' to correctly link the relative clause.

× Yes, I usually go with my school and friends. We went there before I think 10 years when I was a child and I enjoy, really enjoy the that journey and I hope to complete this journey in the next life.

✓ Yes, I usually went with my school and friends. We went there about 10 years ago when I was a child and I enjoyed, really enjoyed that journey and I hope to complete this journey in the next life.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Since the action happened in the past, 'go' should be 'went', 'before I think 10 years' should be 'about 10 years ago', and 'enjoy' should be 'enjoyed'. Also, 'the that journey' is incorrect; it should be 'that journey'.