Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat long and a bit repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and structured by starting with a clear topic sentence, then adding specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

例: I don't go to the library often now because I can find most information online. However, when I was a student, I visited the library daily to study and enjoy its quiet atmosphere.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to give a complete response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid hesitation sounds like 'umm'.

例: In the library, I usually read books and look for references that are expensive or hard to buy. This helps me with my studies because I can access valuable materials without purchasing them.

提案: Your answer starts well but ends abruptly and lacks detail. Provide a complete response with specific details and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I went to the library often as a kid. My school had a large library, and I loved borrowing books, especially during my third grade when I discovered many interesting stories.

提案: Your answer is honest but too brief and does not attempt to expand. Try to give a more developed response by explaining why you don't know or by making a general comment. This shows your ability to handle questions even when you lack specific knowledge.

例: I haven't been to China, so I don't know much about Chinese kids' habits. However, I imagine that many children there visit libraries to study and read, just like kids in other countries.

× I don't often go to the library nowadays because I feel I can find everything online, but I remember going to libraries before during my study day in and day out and I used to enjoy a lot in libraries and enjoy the quiet environment of it.

✓ I don't often go to the library nowadays because I feel I can find everything online, but I remember going to libraries before during my study days day in and day out and I used to enjoy libraries a lot and enjoy their quiet environment.

The phrase 'study day in and day out' is incorrect because 'study' should be pluralized to 'study days' to indicate multiple days. Also, 'enjoy a lot in libraries' is awkward; it should be 'enjoy libraries a lot' for correct word order and clarity. Finally, 'the quiet environment of it' is better expressed as 'their quiet environment' to avoid awkward phrasing.

× I usually read books and I used to find out the umm, I used to find out the references and those books which we were not able to purchase because sometimes they were so costly and limited. So I usually.

✓ I usually read books and I used to find the references and those books which we were not able to purchase because sometimes they were so costly and limited. So I usually did.

The phrase 'used to find out' is incorrect; 'find out' implies discovering information, but here 'find' is more appropriate. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'So I usually.' which is incomplete; it should be completed as 'So I usually did.' to make a complete thought.

× Yes, I remember we had a big library in our school and I really love to go there and borrow books from there. And I remember even during my third.

✓ Yes, I remember we had a big library in our school and I really loved going there and borrowing books from there. And I remember even during my third grade.

The phrase 'I really love to go there' is inconsistent with the past context; it should be 'I really loved going there' to match past tense. Also, 'borrow books from there' is better as 'borrowing books from there' for parallel structure. The sentence 'And I remember even during my third.' is incomplete and should be completed as 'And I remember even during my third grade.' for clarity.

× I actually don't have any idea about Chinese people because I haven't. I have not been there and I have no idea.

✓ I actually don't have any idea about Chinese people because I haven't been there. I have no idea.

The sentence 'because I haven't.' is incomplete and unclear. It should be combined with the following sentence to form 'because I haven't been there.' for clarity and grammatical correctness.