Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more structured and natural by starting with a clear topic sentence, then adding specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say: "Yes, I often go to the library, especially when I was in primary school. I usually visit it whenever I have free time after my lectures because it is a quiet and peaceful place, ideal for studying without any disturbance."

例: Yes, I often go to the library, especially when I was in primary school. I usually visit it whenever I have free time after my lectures because it is a quiet and peaceful place, ideal for studying without any disturbance.

提案: Focus on giving a clear and concise answer with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. For example, you can say: "Whenever I am free from my lectures, I usually go to the library to study and complete my backlog. Since it is a quiet place without any disturbance, I can concentrate well. Besides studying, I also enjoy reading stories and other books there."

例: Whenever I am free from my lectures, I usually go to the library to study and complete my backlog. Since it is a quiet place without any disturbance, I can concentrate well. Besides studying, I also enjoy reading stories and other books there.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more grammatically correct by using a direct topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid filler words and repetition. For example: "No, I did not often go to the library when I was a kid. I only started visiting it regularly after I reached the 6th or 7th grade. Before that, I went there occasionally but not for serious studying."

例: No, I did not often go to the library when I was a kid. I only started visiting it regularly after I reached the 6th or 7th grade. Before that, I went there occasionally but not for serious studying.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear opinion with reasons and avoid hesitation. For example: "Yes, I believe Chinese kids often go to the library because they value education highly and like to read books to improve their knowledge."

例: Yes, I believe Chinese kids often go to the library because they value education highly and like to read books to improve their knowledge.

× I go to the library many of the time when I am studying in my primary school

✓ I go to the library many times when I was studying in my primary school

The phrase 'many of the time' is incorrect; the correct quantifier is 'many times'. Also, since the action refers to the past (studying in primary school), the past tense 'was studying' should be used.

× whenever I am free, uh, from my lecture, I go to there and study myself

✓ whenever I am free from my lectures, I go there and study by myself

The preposition 'to' is unnecessary before 'there'. Also, 'study myself' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'study by myself' to indicate studying alone.

× it's a quiet place, quite silence place for a good study and without disturbance

✓ it's a quiet place, quite a silent place for good study and without disturbance

The word 'silence' is a noun; the adjective form 'silent' should be used to describe the place. Also, 'quite' should be followed by 'a' before 'silent place'.

× I go to the library and oftenly I used to study

✓ I often go to the library and I used to study

The adverb 'oftenly' is incorrect; the correct form is 'often'. Also, 'often' should be placed before the verb 'go' for correct adverb placement.

× I used to my complete my backlog

✓ I used to complete my backlog

The phrase 'used to my complete' is incorrect; the correct form is 'used to complete' to indicate habitual past action.

× because it is the silence place without any disturbance

✓ because it is a silent place without any disturbance

The noun 'silence' should be replaced with the adjective 'silent' to describe the place.

× I complete my all the backlog

✓ I complete all my backlog

The phrase 'my all the backlog' is incorrect; the correct order is 'all my backlog'.

× study at the and also read some stories, some books and the other things

✓ study and also read some stories, books, and other things

The phrase 'study at the and also' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be restructured for clarity and correctness.

× I never go to the library when I'm good to get for the studying

✓ I never went to the library when I was young to study

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past time frame. Also, 'I'm good to get for the studying' is incorrect and should be 'I was young to study'.

× just for the some, uh, little bit of route

✓ just for some little bit of reading

The phrase 'some little bit of route' is incorrect; likely intended 'some little bit of reading' or 'some little bit of study'.

× I'm just, uh, go to there after my 6th or 7th standard

✓ I just went there after my 6th or 7th standard

The phrase 'go to there' is incorrect; 'go there' is correct. Also, past tense 'went' should be used to match the time frame.

× I think so that Chinese kids often go to the library because they're the very, uh, they're the very sorry

✓ I think that Chinese kids often go to the library because they are very studious

The phrase 'they're the very sorry' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'they are very studious' or similar. Also, 'I think so that' is incorrect; 'I think that' is correct.