Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure for natural flow. For example, instead of "search new new books," say "look for new books." Also, include linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I often go to the library because I am an avid reader and enjoy looking for new books to read.

提案: Avoid redundancy such as "quiet and quiet" and "borrowing and returning back." Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about your activities.

例: Usually, I visit the library to borrow and return books. Additionally, I sometimes prefer to read there because it is a quiet place without any distractions.

提案: Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and avoid awkward phrasing like "for searching new books."

例: Reading has been my passion since childhood. I used to go to the library every weekend to find new books, and this habit helped me improve my learning and achieve more.

提案: Avoid unclear or incorrect statements and improve grammar. Be careful with sensitive topics and focus on clear, respectful, and relevant information. Use linking words and specific examples.

例: I am not sure about all Chinese kids, but when I visited China, I noticed many libraries and people who are eager to read and improve their knowledge.

× As an avid reader I like to visit library very often and search new new books.

✓ As an avid reader, I like to visit the library very often and search for new books.

The noun 'library' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'new new books' is a repetition error; it should be 'new books'. Additionally, 'search' should be followed by 'for' when referring to looking for something.

× Usually I visit library for borrowing and returning back the book and sometimes I prefer library for reading because it's one of the quiet and quiet place without any kind of distractions.

✓ Usually I visit the library for borrowing and returning books, and sometimes I prefer the library for reading because it's one of the quietest places without any kind of distractions.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' as it refers to a specific place. 'Returning back' is redundant; 'returning' suffices. 'The book' should be plural 'books' to match the general activity. 'Quiet and quiet place' is repetitive; 'quietest places' is more appropriate to express superlative. Also, 'place' should be plural 'places' to match 'one of the'.

× When I was a child I would go to library every weekend for searching new books and that reading and the presence of library played a significant part in my life for achieving more and that foster my ability to learn more and more.

✓ When I was a child, I would go to the library every weekend to search for new books, and that reading and the presence of the library played a significant part in my life in achieving more and fostering my ability to learn more and more.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the'. 'For searching' should be 'to search for' to express purpose. 'That foster' should be 'fostering' to maintain parallel structure with 'achieving'. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× I visited China once I realized that the Chinese peoples are not really skillful, but also they are knowledge hunger, the presence of large number of libraries, they are showing their avid readers and they are particular about increasing their ability to read, increasing their hobby in reading.

✓ I visited China once and realized that the Chinese people are not only skillful but also knowledge-hungry. The presence of a large number of libraries shows that they are avid readers and are particular about increasing their ability to read and their hobby of reading.

'Peoples' should be 'people' as 'people' is the plural of 'person' when referring to a group. 'Knowledge hunger' should be 'knowledge-hungry' as an adjective. The sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity. 'A large number of libraries' requires the article 'a'. 'They are showing their avid readers' is incorrect; it should be 'shows that they are avid readers'. Also, 'increasing their hobby in reading' is better expressed as 'increasing their hobby of reading'.