List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and incorrect word usage. For example, 'leash' should be 'list'. Also, make your sentences clearer and more concise by directly stating the benefit of making a list. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I shop because it helps me stay organized and ensures I buy everything I need without forgetting anything.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and grammar. Avoid fragmented sentences and unclear phrases. Use linking words to explain how making a list helps you prioritize tasks effectively.

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me organize my tasks and prioritize them efficiently, which improves my productivity.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and repeated phrases. Use clear and concise language to express your opinion. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they believe it's unnecessary and trust their memory to remember everything without writing it down.

提案: Try to provide more specific reasons and use linking words to explain your preference clearly. Avoid vague statements like 'a cell phone is everything in your life.'

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's convenient and I can easily update or check my list anytime, which helps me stay organized throughout the day.

× I really like making a leash when I shop because it it helps my life easier and I can buy everything what I want.

✓ I really like making a list when I shop because it helps make my life easier and I can buy everything I want.

The word 'leash' is incorrect; it should be 'list' (singular). Also, 'everything what I want' is incorrect; 'what' should be omitted. The phrase 'helps my life easier' is incorrect; it should be 'helps make my life easier' to convey the intended meaning.

× It is really work.

✓ It really works.

The phrase 'It is really work' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'It really works' to indicate that something functions or is effective.

× It helps me can organize what. The priority?

✓ It helps me organize what the priorities are.

The original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical. The corrected sentence properly structures the idea that the list helps organize priorities.

× they think it is not necessary for make a list, for making a list.

✓ they think it is not necessary to make a list.

The phrase 'for make a list' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to make a list' after 'necessary'. The phrase 'for making a list' is redundant and unnecessary here.

× I think I believe that they believe that they can remember everything. What?

✓ I believe they think they can remember everything.

The sentence is repetitive and includes an unnecessary 'What?'. Simplifying the sentence improves clarity and correctness.