List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些语法错误和重复，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me remember what I need and saves time when I go shopping.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但有口头语“Uh”，影响流畅度。建议去除口头语，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me organize my tasks, and as a result, I can work more efficiently.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和不清晰的表达，词汇使用不准确。建议简化句子，明确表达原因，并使用正确词汇。

例: Some people don't like making lists because they find it hard to follow them, so they feel it's useless and get confused about their tasks.

提案: 回答中有发音错误和语法问题，表达不够连贯。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，并用连接词连接句子。

例: When I am at work, I prefer to make lists on my phone because it's more efficient. However, at home, I like using paper lists because it feels more personal and organized.

× Yes, I I always make a list to be for shopping because I think make a list can help me figure out what do I want to buy and then that therefore I can save time when I go shopping.

✓ Yes, I always make a list for shopping because I think making a list can help me figure out what I want to buy and therefore I can save time when I go shopping.

句中“make a list”应改为动名词形式“making a list”，因为它作为think的宾语。"what do I want to buy"应改为宾语从句“what I want to buy”，去掉倒装。"to be for shopping"应改为“for shopping”，去掉多余词。

× Because I think. One first people who doesn't like making list is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve sacrif actori from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.

✓ Because I think. First, some people who don't like making lists is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve satisfactory results from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.

“people”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“don't”。“making list”应为复数“making lists”。“sacrif actori”应为“satisfactory results”，拼写错误。

× While I am working, I preferred to make a list on my phone because it is more efficient.

✓ While I am working, I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is more efficient.

句中描述习惯动作，应使用一般现在时“prefer”，而非过去时“preferred”。

× One first people who doesn't like making list is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve sacrif actori from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.

✓ First, some people who don't like making lists do so because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve satisfactory results from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.

“people”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“do”。“making list”应为复数“making lists”。

× Yes, I I always make a list to be for shopping because I think make a list can help me figure out what do I want to buy and then that therefore I can save time when I go shopping.

✓ Yes, I always make a list for shopping because I think making a list can help me figure out what I want to buy and therefore I can save time when I go shopping.

“to be for shopping”中的“to be”多余，应直接用介词短语“for shopping”。

× Because I think. One first people who doesn't like making list is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve sacrif actori from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.

✓ First, some people who don't like making lists do so because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve satisfactory results from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.

“One first people”表达不当，应改为“First, some people”。

× I like bows what I am at work.

✓ I like both when I am at work.

“bows”拼写错误，应为“both”，表示两者都喜欢。

× Because I think. One first people who doesn't like making list is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve sacrif actori from making a list and then they probably don't know what they need to do.

✓ I think the first reason some people don't like making lists is because they can't follow the list, so they can't achieve satisfactory results from making a list and probably don't know what they need to do.

句子结构混乱，应调整为完整句子，去掉多余的“Because I think.”，使表达更清晰。