List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Verbessern Sie die Klarheit und Struktur Ihrer Antwort, indem Sie den Satzfluss verbessern und Wiederholungen vermeiden. Verwenden Sie verbindende Wörter, um Ihre Gedanken logisch zu verbinden.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list to organize my purchases. However, sometimes I forget to bring the list with me, which makes it less effective. To solve this, I try to keep the list on my phone so I can always access it.

提案: Verbessern Sie die Grammatik und Satzstruktur, um Ihre Antwort klarer und verständlicher zu machen. Verwenden Sie spezifische Beispiele und verbinden Sie Ihre Ideen logisch.

例: At my work in a kindergarten, I don't usually make detailed lists. However, I sometimes write down goals and achievements for the children to track their progress effectively.

提案: Verbessern Sie die Satzstruktur und Wortwahl, um Ihre Meinung klarer auszudrücken. Verwenden Sie verbindende Wörter, um Ihre Argumentation zu stärken.

例: Some people prefer to remember their tasks mentally and add or change items as needed. Therefore, making a list might not suit their personal style or help them stay organized.

提案: Verbessern Sie die Klarheit und Grammatik Ihrer Antwort. Strukturieren Sie Ihre Sätze besser und verwenden Sie verbindende Wörter, um Ihre Gedanken logisch zu verbinden.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because I often forget paper lists. However, I also like writing by hand, so recently I started taking photos of my handwritten lists to ensure I don't forget them when I go shopping.

× I always try to make a list when I shop and write everything down, but unfortunately very often I forget that list afterwards or forget to look at it and check up on it while I'm shopping.

✓ I always try to make a list when I shop and write everything down, but unfortunately very often I forget that list afterwards or forget to look at it and check it while I'm shopping.

The phrase 'check up on it' is informal and redundant here. The correct form is 'check it' to mean reviewing the list. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× What kind of list would I do you for my wake?

✓ What kind of list would I do for my work?

The phrase 'do you for my wake' contains incorrect pronouns and misspelling. It should be 'do for my work' to correctly express the intended meaning.

× I wake in a kindergarten, so I do you might daily routines of the kids and yeah, sometimes I need to write down the goals and achievements I'm trying to. Comprehend with the kids, but otherwise there is no big list I need to write down.

✓ I work in a kindergarten, so I do the daily routines of the kids and yeah, sometimes I need to write down the goals and achievements I'm trying to accomplish with the kids, but otherwise there is no big list I need to write down.

The word 'wake' is a misspelling of 'work'. 'Do you might daily routines' is incorrect; it should be 'do the daily routines'. 'Comprehend with the kids' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'accomplish'. These corrections fix preposition and word choice errors.

× I think some people rather like to remember the list and go on about adding an substituting things they need, so therefore Elise is actually not helping or supporting their ways.

✓ I think some people would rather remember the list and go on about adding and substituting things they need, so therefore a list is actually not helping or supporting their ways.

'An substituting' is incorrect; it should be 'and substituting'. 'Elise' is a mishearing or typo for 'a list'. These corrections fix pronoun and article errors.

× I do prefer list on my phone because like I said before I usually forget my list which I wrote down but then on the other side I rather write things down with my hand by pencil or pen.

✓ I do prefer a list on my phone because, like I said before, I usually forget my list which I wrote down, but on the other hand, I rather write things down by hand with a pencil or pen.

'List on my phone' needs an article 'a list'. 'On the other side' should be 'on the other hand'. 'With my hand by pencil or pen' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'by hand with a pencil or pen'. These corrections fix preposition and article usage.

× So what I started to do lately as I write a list, if a pen or pencil tenant take a photo so I had not forget my list and then I bring it with me.

✓ So what I started to do lately is when I write a list with a pen or pencil, I take a photo so I do not forget my list and then I bring it with me.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'as I write' should be 'is when I write'; 'if a pen or pencil tenant' is incorrect and should be 'with a pen or pencil'; 'had not forget' should be 'do not forget'. These corrections fix verb tense, preposition, and sentence structure errors.