List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá đầy đủ nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và câu hơi dài, gây khó hiểu. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because it helps me control what I need to buy. This way, I avoid purchasing unnecessary items and save money.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý nghĩa khó hiểu. Bạn nên tập trung vào việc trình bày ý chính rõ ràng, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ nối để làm rõ các ý phụ.

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized and focused. For example, it allows me to prioritize important tasks and manage my time more efficiently.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến người nghe khó hiểu. Bạn nên luyện tập cách diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng phù hợp.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous. They want the freedom to do whatever they feel like during the day without restrictions.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng bị lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp lại và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: I prefer making lists on paper because I find it easier to write down important tasks. Also, I enjoy the traditional feeling of writing by hand, which makes me more focused.

× I always make a list when I should go shopping because when we make a list we can control what we want to buy an avoid buying some extra unnecessary things and also we can prevent wasting money on items we don't want, the item we don't need.

✓ I always make a list when I go shopping because when we make a list we can control what we want to buy and avoid buying some extra unnecessary things and also we can prevent wasting money on items we don't want, the items we don't need.

The modal verb 'should' is incorrectly used here. The sentence talks about a habitual action, so simple present tense 'go' is appropriate instead of 'should go'. Also, 'an' should be 'and' and 'item' should be plural 'items' to match the context.

× Yes, I always make a list for my work because it's helped me to stay organized and focused on doing something.

✓ Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me to stay organized and focused on doing tasks.

The phrase 'it's helped me' is incorrect because the present perfect tense does not fit the habitual context. 'It helps me' in simple present is correct. Also, 'doing something' is vague; 'doing tasks' is clearer.

× First of all, when we have list or Laos me to prioritize my important task in manage my time before more efficiently and for example when I do right now and I need it.

✓ First of all, when we have a list, it allows me to prioritize my important tasks and manage my time more efficiently. For example, when I do my work now, I need it.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Laos me' is a typo for 'allows me'. Missing articles and plural forms are corrected. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Oh, some people don't like a making list because they just wanna do something they do.

✓ Oh, some people don't like making lists because they just want to do what they want.

The article 'a' before 'making list' is incorrect; 'making lists' is the correct plural form without 'a'. Also, 'wanna' is informal and 'do something they do' is unclear; corrected to 'do what they want' for clarity.

× They want to be like in a day and it on so we can free is because they want to free to make everything that they want.

✓ They want to be free during the day so they can do everything they want.

The original sentence is confusing with incorrect pronouns and phrases. 'Be like in a day and it on so we can free is' is nonsensical. Corrected to a clear sentence expressing the intended meaning.

× And also they can spend a lot of time what they you do, you do really want.

✓ Also, they can spend a lot of time doing what they really want to do.

The phrase 'spend a lot of time what they you do' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'spend time doing something'. The sentence is corrected for proper preposition and verb form usage.

× Actually, I preferred to make a list on paper because I feel like I can write down something that I really the important task that I have to do in a day.

✓ Actually, I prefer to make a list on paper because I feel like I can write down the important tasks that I really have to do in a day.

'Preferred' is past tense but the context is present preference, so 'prefer' is correct. Also, 'something that I really the important task' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'the important tasks that I really have to do'.

× And also I think is the traditional way for me because I feel like I I I love to writing something in on a paper and is the happening more affection.

✓ Also, I think it is the traditional way for me because I feel like I love writing something on paper and it feels more effective.

Missing subject 'it' before 'is the traditional way'. Repeated 'I' removed. 'Love to writing' corrected to 'love writing'. 'In on a paper' corrected to 'on paper'. 'Happening more affection' is unclear, corrected to 'feels more effective' to convey intended meaning.