List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, instead of repeating 'and also', use 'which' or 'so that'.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping because it keeps me organized and helps me use my time efficiently. It also reminds me of what I need to buy, so I avoid spontaneous purchases.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Avoid fragmented sentences and explain your opinion clearly with linking words like 'because' or 'however'.

例: Usually, I don't like making lists for my work because I prefer to be flexible. However, I understand that for some people, lists help them stay organized and work efficiently.

提案: Focus on clear and coherent sentences. Avoid repetition and explain reasons logically using linking words such as 'because' or 'so'.

例: I think it depends on personal preference. Some people like making lists because it helps them stay organized, but others, like me, find it restrictive since it forces you to do tasks one by one.

提案: Avoid sentence fragments and unclear words. Use complete sentences and clear comparisons with linking words like 'while' or 'whereas'.

例: Most of the time, I prefer making lists on my phone because it is more convenient and I can edit the list anytime. On the other hand, making lists on paper feels old-fashioned and less flexible.

× And it also makes me remember what I have to buy and it prevents me from doing a spontaneous. Shopping. And buying.

✓ And it also helps me remember what I have to buy and prevents me from doing spontaneous shopping and buying.

The phrase 'doing a spontaneous. Shopping. And buying.' is incorrect because 'shopping' and 'buying' should not be separated by full stops and 'spontaneous' should directly modify 'shopping' without an article 'a'. Also, 'makes me remember' is better expressed as 'helps me remember' for natural usage.

× Making list is like doing things organized and you can't do work.

✓ Making a list is like doing things in an organized way and you can't do work.

The noun 'list' is countable and requires an article 'a' when singular. Also, 'doing things organized' is incorrect; it should be 'doing things in an organized way' to correctly express the idea.

× Sideways so it does not work for me that well, but for some people it may work well and good.

✓ Sideways, so it does not work for me that well, but for some people, it may work well.

The phrase 'work well and good' is redundant; 'work well' suffices. Also, commas are needed after 'sideways' and 'people' to separate clauses properly.

× Some people may do like making list and person like me I don't like making a list.

✓ Some people may like making lists, but a person like me doesn't like making a list.

The phrase 'do like making list' is incorrect; 'like making lists' is correct. Also, 'person like me' needs an article 'a' and the verb should agree with singular subject 'person' as 'doesn't'.

× Making list makes things more things more organized, which is like you can do two things at a time, you have to do things separately so.

✓ Making a list makes things more organized, which means you can't do two things at a time; you have to do things separately.

'Making list' should be 'Making a list' as 'list' is countable. The phrase 'more things more organized' is redundant and incorrect; 'more organized' suffices. Also, the sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Most of time I prefer making a list on my phone because it is more handy and I can. Edit the list whenever I want.

✓ Most of the time, I prefer making a list on my phone because it is handier and I can edit the list whenever I want.

The phrase 'Most of time' is missing the article 'the'. Also, 'more handy' is better expressed as 'handier' for comparative form. The full stop after 'can' is incorrect and removed.

× And on other hand, making a list on paper is like mobed an old school. Where you can't.

✓ And on the other hand, making a list on paper is like being old school, where you can't edit it easily.

The phrase 'on other hand' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Mobed' is likely a typo for 'being'. The sentence is incomplete and is corrected for clarity and completeness.