List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and clear. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. For example, directly say you make a list to remember necessary items and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list because I tend to forget things easily. This helps me remember all the necessary items I need to buy.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence fluency. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and express your feelings clearly.

例: Yes, I make a list for my work every day, including homework and coursework. After completing each task, I check it off, which makes me feel satisfied and accomplished.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to explain reasons logically.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they find it complicated. Moreover, they prefer to keep their lives simple, so adding lists might make them feel uncomfortable.

提案: Try to improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is an essential item that I always carry. This way, I won't forget my list, unlike paper lists which I might leave behind.

× Yes, I'm a forgetful person so I will make a list when I go to shop to remember all of this stuff that I need to buy so just. In case if for getting the necessary tease that I need to buy.

✓ Yes, I'm a forgetful person so I will make a list when I go shopping to remember all of the stuff that I need to buy, just in case I forget the necessary things that I need to buy.

The phrase 'go to shop' is incorrect; the correct form is 'go shopping' because 'go' is followed by a verb in the '-ing' form to indicate the activity. Also, 'for getting' should be 'forget' to express the intended meaning. 'Tease' is a typo and should be 'things'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Yes, I make a list for my work and it works really well and I I just made a list for my homework and my course work everyday and after I finish one of them I will I will check it out and then and then I will feel feel really comfortable and have a feeling of accomplishment.

✓ Yes, I make a list for my work and it works really well. I make a list for my homework and my coursework every day, and after I finish one of them, I check it off and then I feel really comfortable and have a feeling of accomplishment.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'I just made' should be 'I make' to maintain present tense consistency. 'Course work' is one word 'coursework'. 'Check it out' should be 'check it off' to mean marking tasks as done. Repetition of words like 'I' and 'feel' is removed for clarity.

× Maybe because it is too complicated and some people just want to keep their life in a simple way, so if they add something like list into the life they will feel really uncomfortable.

✓ Maybe because it is too complicated and some people just want to keep their life simple, so if they add something like a list into their life, they will feel really uncomfortable.

The phrase 'keep their life in a simple way' is awkward; 'keep their life simple' is more natural. 'Something like list' needs an article 'a list'. 'Into the life' should be 'into their life' to be specific and correct.

× I prefer the make a list on my phone because nowadays phone has already become an essential part of our lives and where wherever we go we won't forget to take on our phone.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because nowadays the phone has already become an essential part of our lives, and wherever we go, we won't forget to take our phone with us.

'I prefer the make' is incorrect; it should be 'I prefer to make'. 'Nowadays phone' needs the definite article 'the phone'. 'Take on our phone' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'take our phone with us'. 'Where wherever' is redundant; 'wherever' alone is sufficient.

× So it is more convenience for me to take on my phone because I won't forget it and if I take on a paper I would definitely forget it to take when I need.

✓ So it is more convenient for me to use my phone because I won't forget it, and if I take a paper, I would definitely forget to bring it when I need it.

'More convenience' is incorrect; the adjective 'convenient' should be used. 'Take on my phone' is incorrect; 'use my phone' is better. 'Take on a paper' should be 'take a paper' or 'bring a paper'. The phrase 'forget it to take when I need' is awkward; 'forget to bring it when I need it' is correct.