List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you make a list, and give specific examples.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because it helps me remember everything I need. For instance, I usually include groceries and household essentials on my list. This way, I avoid forgetting important items and save time during shopping.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about how the list helps you with your work.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because some tasks are very important and I don't want to forget them. For example, I list my school assignments along with their deadlines. This helps me stay organized and complete my work on time.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to connect ideas. Provide specific reasons why some people avoid making lists.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they have a good memory and rarely forget things. Also, some prefer to keep their lists in their minds instead of writing them down or using their phones.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to express your preference clearly with reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas. Avoid filler words and finish your sentences.

例: I prefer to make lists on my mobile phone because I always carry it with me. This way, I can easily add or remove items whenever I need to, which makes it very convenient.

× Definitely whenever I go shopping I perpera list because it helps me.

✓ Definitely whenever I go shopping I prepare a list because it helps me.

The word 'perpera' is a misspelling of the verb 'prepare' in its base form. Correct spelling is necessary for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× How to remember everything which I want to buy?

✓ It helps me remember everything that I want to buy.

The original sentence is a fragment and not a complete sentence. It lacks a subject and verb. Rewriting it as a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Oh, such as groceries and household essentials.

✓ For example, groceries and household essentials.

The phrase 'Oh, such as' is informal and awkward here. Using 'For example' is more appropriate to introduce examples.

× Moreover, I avoid forgetting anything important. When I make a list.

✓ Moreover, when I make a list, I avoid forgetting anything important.

The original sentence is split incorrectly, creating a fragment. Combining the two parts into one complete sentence corrects the structure.

× Certainly I make a list for my work, becaused some work are very important, so I do not like to forget my work.

✓ Certainly, I make a list for my work because some tasks are very important, so I do not like to forget them.

'Becaused' is a misspelling of 'because'. Also, 'work are' is incorrect; 'tasks are' or 'work is' should be used. 'My work' repeated is redundant; replacing with 'them' improves clarity.

× Such as my school work and I make a list to about my work like oh.

✓ For example, my school work, and I make a list about my tasks like, oh,

The phrase is awkward and incomplete. 'Work' is uncountable, so 'tasks' is better for countable items. Also, 'to about' is incorrect preposition usage.

× I make a list to about my work like oh.

✓ I make a list about my work, like, oh,

The phrase 'to about' is incorrect; only one preposition 'about' is needed here.

× What kind of work I do and words of deadline of my work.

✓ what kind of work I do and the deadlines of my tasks.

The original sentence is fragmented and awkward. Adding 'the' before 'deadlines' and rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Some people do not like making list because they have very great memory an never forget anything.

✓ Some people do not like making lists because they have a very good memory and never forget anything.

'List' should be plural 'lists' to match 'making'. 'An' is a typo for 'and'. 'Very great memory' is awkward; 'a very good memory' is more natural.

× Moreover. As some individuals will prepare the list in their mind.

✓ Moreover, some individuals prepare the list in their mind.

The original has a sentence fragment starting with 'As'. Combining into one sentence and removing 'As' corrects the structure.

× Instead of phone and.

✓ Instead of using a phone.

The phrase is incomplete and unclear. Completing it clarifies the meaning.

× Although both ways are good to make a list butter, I prefer to make a list on my mobile phone bill 'cause, uh, I carry my mobile phone at all time in addition to this, so I can edit the items on the list when I need.

✓ Although both ways are good to make a list, I prefer to make a list on my mobile phone because I carry it at all times. In addition, I can edit the items on the list whenever I need to.

'Butter' is a typo for 'better'. 'Bill' is unnecessary. 'At all time' should be 'at all times'. The sentence is long and awkward; splitting into two sentences improves clarity.

× And I add something and.

✓ I can also add items as needed.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Rewriting it as a complete sentence clarifies the meaning.