List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Javobingiz tabiiy va mavzuga mos, lekin gaplaringizni qisqartirish va takrorlanishni kamaytirish kerak. Masalan, "I have a short memory, so I like to make a list when I go grocery shopping to avoid forgetting items." kabi aniq va qisqa gap tuzing.

例: I usually make a list when I go grocery shopping because I tend to forget things easily.

提案: Javobingizda grammatik xatolar va noaniqliklar bor. "plant" o'rniga "plan" so'zini ishlating va gaplarni aniqroq tuzing. Masalan, "I don't usually make a list for my daily work because I prefer to do many tasks spontaneously."

例: I don't usually make a list for my daily work because I prefer to do many tasks spontaneously.

提案: Javobingizda gaplar to'liq emas va mantiqiy bog'lanish yetishmaydi. To'liq va bog'langan gaplar tuzing, masalan: "Some people don't like making lists because they find it boring or prefer to change their plans during the day."

例: Some people don't like making lists because they find it boring or prefer to change their plans during the day.

提案: Javobingiz yaxshi, lekin takrorlanishni kamaytiring va grammatikani yaxshilang. Masalan, "I prefer to make lists on my phone because paper lists can be lost easily, and using my phone is more convenient."

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because paper lists can be lost easily, and using my phone is more convenient.

× Yes, actually I can't remember things and I have a short memory storage so I would like to list my things when I when it comes to grocery shopping because I can forget lots of things in my mind.

✓ Yes, actually I can't remember things and I have a short memory storage so I would like to list my things when it comes to grocery shopping because I can forget lots of things in my mind.

The phrase 'when I when it comes to grocery shopping' contains a repetition of 'when I' which is incorrect. The correct form is 'when it comes to grocery shopping'. This is a common mistake where extra words are mistakenly repeated. To improve, carefully review sentences to avoid unnecessary repetition.

× I don't really do a list for my daily work and it doesn't really work if I do because I like to do lots of things in a day that isn't in the plant.

✓ I don't really make a list for my daily work and it doesn't really work if I do because I like to do lots of things in a day that aren't in the plan.

The word 'list' is countable and the correct verb collocation is 'make a list' not 'do a list'. Also, 'isn't' should be 'aren't' because it refers to 'lots of things' which is plural. 'Plant' is a wrong word here; the correct word is 'plan'. To improve, use correct collocations and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subjects.

× In my opinion, because they're too lazy for it. Or they can. Change the plans during the day as so lots of people don't make lists for a day.

✓ In my opinion, it's because they're too lazy for it or they can change their plans during the day, so lots of people don't make lists for a day.

The original sentences are fragmented and have incorrect punctuation and conjunction use. 'Or they can. Change the plans' should be combined into one sentence. Also, 'as so' is incorrect; 'so' alone is sufficient. To improve, avoid sentence fragments and use conjunctions properly to connect ideas.

× If I ever had to make a list, I would prefer to do it in my phone because if I do it on paper I can easily forget it somewhere or lost it.

✓ If I ever had to make a list, I would prefer to do it on my phone because if I do it on paper I can easily forget it somewhere or lose it.

The phrase 'do it in my phone' should be 'do it on my phone' because we use 'on' with devices. Also, 'lost it' is incorrect; the correct form is 'lose it' to match the modal verb 'can'. To improve, use correct prepositions with devices and use base form of verbs after modal verbs.

× So I prefer to do it in my phone because it is much convenient for me.

✓ So I prefer to do it on my phone because it is much more convenient for me.

The adjective 'convenient' needs a comparative form 'more convenient' when comparing. Also, the preposition should be 'on my phone' not 'in my phone'. To improve, use comparative forms correctly and appropriate prepositions with devices.