List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp câu hợp lý để ý nghĩa được truyền đạt chính xác. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời trở nên tự nhiên và logic hơn.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I go shopping because I tend to forget things. Making a list helps me stay organized and save time, especially when I have guests coming over. It also ensures that I don't miss any important items.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Hãy tập trung trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và sử dụng các từ nối để làm rõ ý. Ngoài ra, nên cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và chi tiết hơn để câu trả lời thuyết phục.

例: Yes, I often make lists at work because it helps me stay organized and focus on important tasks. For example, when I write down what I need to do, I become more productive and can complete my tasks on time.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lặp từ. Hãy giải thích rõ lý do và đưa ra ví dụ cụ thể để câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: Actually, some people don't like making lists because they find it uncomfortable to write things down and carry a notebook. They prefer to remember and organize tasks in their mind, which makes them feel more flexible. For example, they might find it easier to adapt to changes without relying on a list.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi nhỏ như 'every anytime'.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is very convenient and portable. Since I always have my smartphone with me, I can check and update my list anytime, which helps me remember tasks better than using paper. Also, I can set reminders or alarms to stay on track.

× By making a list helps me stay organized and safe time especially when I have guest coming over is also ensure that I don't miss any important items.

✓ Making a list helps me stay organized and save time, especially when I have guests coming over. It also ensures that I don't miss any important items.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'By making a list' as the subject, which is not proper. The gerund phrase should be the subject without 'By'. Also, 'safe time' should be 'save time', and 'guest' should be plural 'guests'. The sentence is also a run-on and needs to be split for clarity.

× By making a list helps me stay organized and safe time especially when I have guest coming over is also ensure that I don't miss any important items.

✓ Making a list helps me stay organized and save time, especially when I have guests coming over. It also ensures that I don't miss any important items.

The word 'guest' should be plural 'guests' because it refers to more than one person. Using the singular form here is incorrect.

× So is half meal lot in organize and focus on what's the important tasks in how to complete my test on time.

✓ So it helps me organize and focus on the important tasks and how to complete my tasks on time.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and unclear phrasing. 'Is half meal lot in organize' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me organize'. Also, 'test' should be 'tasks' to make sense in context.

× So is half meal lot in organize and focus on what's the important tasks in how to complete my test on time.

✓ So it helps me organize and focus on the important tasks and how to complete my tasks on time.

The word 'tasks' is plural, so the verb and pronouns should agree accordingly. Also, 'test' should be 'tasks' to maintain consistency.

× For example when I write down and I need to do a few more productive.

✓ For example, when I write things down, I am able to be more productive.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks proper structure. It needs a subject and verb to complete the thought and clarify the meaning.

× Actually I think is because they think that is very uncomfortable when write down things and carrying the notebook with them is that they prefer to remember and organize in their mind which make them feel more flexible.

✓ Actually, I think it is because they find it very uncomfortable to write things down and carry a notebook with them. They prefer to remember and organize things in their mind, which makes them feel more flexible.

The original sentence misuses pronouns like 'is' instead of 'it is' and lacks clarity. Also, 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'which'. The sentence is also run-on and needs to be split for clarity.

× Actually I think is because they think that is very uncomfortable when write down things and carrying the notebook with them is that they prefer to remember and organize in their mind which make them feel more flexible.

✓ Actually, I think it is because they find it very uncomfortable to write things down and carry a notebook with them. They prefer to remember and organize things in their mind, which makes them feel more flexible.

The phrase 'organize in their mind' should be 'organize things in their mind' to correctly use the preposition and object.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is very convenient and portable.

✓ I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is very convenient and portable.

Since the context is about making lists in general, the plural 'lists' is more appropriate than the singular 'a list'.

× I always have my smart phone with me so I can check update my list every anytime which helps me remember test better than using paper.

✓ I always have my smartphone with me, so I can check and update my list anytime, which helps me remember tasks better than using paper.

The adverb 'anytime' should be placed correctly after the verb phrase 'check and update'. Also, 'test' should be 'tasks' to fit the context.