List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and complete. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add a reason using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I shop because it helps me stay organized and ensures I don't forget anything important.

提案: Your answer needs grammatical correction and clearer structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about how making lists helps your work.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work, and they are very effective. They give me a sense of accomplishment because I plan my tasks a day in advance, which helps me stay focused.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Make sure to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons using linking words.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they find it time-consuming and believe it doesn't help them stay organized.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases. Provide a clear preference with reasons, using linking words and relevant vocabulary.

例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it is more convenient and helps me organize my tasks better than using paper.

× If I do make a list when I shop because it helps me to be organized.

✓ I do make a list when I shop because it helps me to be organized.

The original sentence is a fragment and lacks proper sentence structure. Starting with 'If' suggests a conditional clause, but the main clause is missing. Removing 'If' corrects the sentence to a complete statement.

× Yes it do work.

✓ Yes, it does work.

The subject 'it' is third person singular, so the verb should be 'does' instead of 'do' to agree in number and person.

× And it gives me a sense of accomplishment because I've been planning this since maybe a day prior.

✓ It gives me a sense of accomplishment because I've been planning this since maybe a day before.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal and can be avoided in formal speech. Also, 'a day prior' is less common; 'a day before' is more natural in this context.

× Leaving is a waste of energy and a lot of work and it doesn't work.

✓ Making lists is a waste of energy and a lot of work, and it doesn't work.

The word 'Leaving' seems incorrect in context; it should be 'Making lists'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs a comma before 'and' to separate clauses properly.

× On my phone because it helps me to be organized with Mastana people to us and helps me way more than a paper.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone because it helps me to be organized with most people and helps me way more than paper.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'Mastana people to us'. Correcting to 'most people' and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.