List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors which affect the natural flow. Try to make your sentences more concise and coherent, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas logically. Also, ensure your vocabulary is relevant and sentences are grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me remember all the groceries I need. This way, I can shop efficiently without forgetting anything, and it reduces confusion about what to buy.

提案: Your response lacks clarity and contains awkward phrasing. Focus on directly answering the question with clear topic sentences and supporting details. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to improve coherence. Also, avoid unnecessary filler phrases and ensure vocabulary fits the context.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because they help me stay punctual and focused on my goals. This improves my efficiency, especially since my job involves managing many tasks that require good organization.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to connect your points logically. Also, be specific about reasons why some people dislike making lists.

例: Some people dislike making lists because they feel confident enough to remember tasks without writing them down. Others think that lists slow them down since they prefer to work at their own pace rather than following a set plan.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Try to express your preference clearly and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your answer coherent. Also, avoid redundancy and ensure grammatical accuracy.

例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is always with me, whether I am at work or shopping. This way, I don't have to worry about losing a piece of paper, and I can easily update my list whenever needed.

× It also helps me to making list.

✓ It also helps me to make a list.

The verb 'helps' should be followed by the base form of the verb 'make' after 'to', not the '-ing' form 'making'. The correct structure is 'helps me to make'.

× Also helps me to be more confident as they won't have be I won't be consumer confusion restored about what to buy.

✓ It also helps me to be more confident as I won't have consumer confusion about what to buy.

The sentence has unclear pronoun usage and extra words. 'They' is incorrect here; it should be 'I'. Also, 'have be' and 'restored' are incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the subject and removes unnecessary words.

× More commonly, yes I do as it helps me to remember all the groceries and items that have to bring it to my home.

✓ More commonly, yes I do as it helps me to remember all the groceries and items that I have to bring to my home.

The phrase 'have to bring it to my home' is incorrect because 'it' is unnecessary and the subject 'I' is missing before 'have to bring'. The correct form includes 'I have to bring'.

× Moreover, it actually helps me to organize all the stuff in without any hustle.

✓ Moreover, it actually helps me to organize all the stuff without any hassle.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here and 'hustle' is incorrectly used; the correct word is 'hassle' meaning difficulty. Removing 'in' and replacing 'hustle' with 'hassle' corrects the sentence.

× Well, of course yes it is because whenever I make a list from my work, it actually makes me more punctual as I have desired set goals.

✓ Well, of course yes it is because whenever I make a list for my work, it actually makes me more punctual as I have desired set goals.

The preposition 'from' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'for' when referring to making a list related to work.

× Moreover, it also provides me some efficiency becauses there are a lot of faces in my work that require organizing of stuff.

✓ Moreover, it also provides me with some efficiency because there are a lot of tasks in my work that require organizing stuff.

The word 'faces' is incorrect; it should be 'tasks'. Also, 'provides me some efficiency' should be 'provides me with some efficiency'. 'Organizing of stuff' is better as 'organizing stuff'.

× That's why I think as I would like to say, that list is a preferred way for me to add.

✓ That's why I think, as I would like to say, that making a list is my preferred way to stay organized.

The original sentence is unclear and awkward. 'That list is a preferred way for me to add' is incorrect. The correction clarifies the meaning and improves sentence structure.

× Making lists is not everyone's cup of tea and some people think that they are self confident and the dawning actually need to make the list.

✓ Making lists is not everyone's cup of tea and some people think that they are self-confident and do not actually need to make a list.

The phrase 'the dawning actually need' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'do not actually need'. Also, 'self confident' should be hyphenated as 'self-confident'.

× Moreover, these let's think that these people think that making this actually slows them down as they have to do the work according to a desired pace instead of actually finishing the work before hand.

✓ Moreover, these people think that making lists actually slows them down as they have to do the work at a desired pace instead of finishing the work beforehand.

'These let's think' is incorrect; it should be 'these people think'. 'Making this' should be 'making lists'. 'Before hand' should be one word 'beforehand'.

× Nowadays, in this technologically advanced world, I would say I prefer using a mobile phone instead of a piece of paper and the mobile phone is always with me.

✓ Nowadays, in this technologically advanced world, I would say I prefer using my mobile phone instead of a piece of paper because the mobile phone is always with me.

Adding 'my' before 'mobile phone' clarifies possession. Also, connecting the two ideas with 'because' improves sentence flow.

× I carried too long myself either to work or some other supermarket where the wherever I go where is a piece of paper might be lost for me as I'm a little of.

✓ I carry my phone with me wherever I go, whether to work or the supermarket, because a piece of paper might get lost and I'm a bit forgetful.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. 'Carried too long myself' is incorrect; 'carry my phone with me' is correct. 'Where the wherever I go where is a piece of paper might be lost for me' is unclear and corrected for clarity. 'I'm a little of' is incomplete; 'I'm a bit forgetful' completes the thought.