List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Try to directly answer the question first, then add specific details. Avoid unclear phrases like 'I special in a kitchen appliance' and 'purchase the Teams'. Use simple, correct sentences and linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go to the store. For example, I usually list kitchen appliances that I need to replace or buy. This helps me stay organized and avoid forgetting important items. Also, if I hear about a new product in the market, I add it to my list to try it out.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases. Provide specific examples of how making a list helps your work.

例: Yes, I usually make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized. For example, if I prepare a list of tasks in the morning, I can complete them efficiently throughout the day. This way, I do not forget important duties and can manage my time better.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to grammar and vocabulary errors. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. Provide specific reasons why some people avoid making lists, and use linking words to connect your points.

例: Some people do not like making lists because they feel experienced enough to remember their tasks without writing them down. Others may avoid lists because they are not very organized or find it time-consuming to prepare them.

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct response, then explain your preference with specific reasons. Use correct grammar and linking words to improve coherence.

例: I prefer to make a list on my phone because it is convenient and easy to carry. Since I always have my phone with me, I do not need to carry extra paper. Also, using a phone helps me keep track of what I have purchased and what I still need to buy.

× I special in a kitchen appliance and whenever I go for the shopping then I used to see that list.

✓ I specialise in kitchen appliances and whenever I go shopping, I use that list.

The phrase 'special in' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'specialise in'. Also, 'go for the shopping' should be 'go shopping'. The verb 'used to see' is incorrect here; it should be 'use' to indicate present habit.

× According to that list, I used to purchase the Teams.

✓ According to that list, I purchase the items.

The word 'Teams' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'items' to refer to things bought. Also, 'used to purchase' implies past habit, but the context suggests present habit, so 'purchase' is better.

× Apart from that iPhone, if something's new head arrived in market, then I pick up for my trial.

✓ Apart from that, if something new has arrived in the market, then I pick it up for my trial.

The phrase 'something's new head arrived' is incorrect; it should be 'something new has arrived'. Also, 'in market' should be 'in the market'. 'Pick up for my trial' needs the object 'it' to be clear.

× 5 mil yes, I usually make a list for my work because it helps me to organize example between interchange with Alzheimer's chef and so for example, if I go in the morning, so if I make sure to do it and I will say in the morning so we can easily make order in full day and overall the list.

✓ Yes, I usually make a list for my work because it helps me to organize tasks, for example, coordinating with the Alzheimer's chef. If I go in the morning, I make sure to complete the tasks so we can easily manage the whole day using the list.

The original sentence is unclear and contains irrelevant phrases like '5 mil' and 'interchange with Alzheimer's chef'. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects quantifier and sentence structure errors.

× Some people avoid a like English becauses they have enough experience to for their work and some people avoid making list to do to diligence and they have not enough organized matter.

✓ Some people avoid making lists because they have enough experience for their work, and some people avoid making lists due to lack of diligence and poor organization.

The phrase 'avoid a like English becauses' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'avoid making lists because'. Also, 'to do to diligence' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'due to lack of diligence'. 'Not enough organized matter' is corrected to 'poor organization'.

× Making a list in form is quite comfort table for me with 'cause it is easy to carry her.

✓ Making a list on my phone is quite comfortable for me because it is easy to carry.

The phrase 'in form' should be 'on my phone'. 'Comfort table' is incorrect; it should be 'comfortable'. 'With 'cause' is informal and incorrect; use 'because'. 'Carry her' is incorrect; it should be 'carry'.

× Anyway, we have to carry our phone, so whenever we do not care, we do not need to carry the extra paper.

✓ Anyway, we have to carry our phone, so we do not need to carry extra paper.

The phrase 'whenever we do not care' is incorrect and unnecessary. The sentence is clearer without it. Also, 'the extra paper' can be 'extra paper' as a general statement.

× So and is informed. Basically we can remember that what we have purchased and what we're not purchasing a lot.

✓ So it is convenient. Basically, we can remember what we have purchased and what we have not purchased a lot of.

The phrase 'So and is informed' is incorrect; it should be 'So it is convenient'. 'What we're not purchasing a lot' is unclear; corrected to 'what we have not purchased a lot of' for clarity.