List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more coherent and complete. Use full sentences and avoid fragmented phrases. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, I usually make a list when I shop because it helps me stay organized. I write down the items I need to buy and keep the list in my pocket. For example, last week I wrote a list before going to the market, and it helped me remember everything.

提案: Try to give a clear and complete answer. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Explain your reason clearly and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: No, I don't usually make a list for my work because my tasks are often immediate and change quickly. Therefore, making a list does not work well for me in my shop.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and clear. Use complete sentences and explain your ideas with reasons and examples. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

例: I think some people don't like making lists because they prefer to be spontaneous. Also, they might find it boring or don't want to spend time thinking about organizing their tasks.

提案: Try to speak in full sentences and avoid repetition. Explain your preference clearly and give a specific example using linking words.

例: I prefer to make a list on paper because it is easier for me to memorize and see it right after I write it. For instance, last night I wrote my grocery list on paper before going shopping.

× I usually make a list so that I can organize. What is my? Going to buy in the market and it always have in my pocket and.

✓ I usually make a list so that I can organize what I am going to buy in the market, and I always have it in my pocket.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. 'What is my? Going to buy' is incorrect and should be combined into a single clause 'what I am going to buy'. Also, 'it always have' should be 'I always have it' to maintain subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× For instance. Last time I write.

✓ For instance, last time I wrote.

The verb 'write' should be in the past tense 'wrote' to match the time reference 'last time'. Also, the sentence fragments should be combined for clarity.

× No, I don't usually write in a list. In my work because it has an instantaneous. Or. Load in where I. Uh. Work in my shop.

✓ No, I don't usually write a list at work because it is very busy where I work in my shop.

The phrase 'write in a list' is incorrect; it should be 'write a list'. 'In my work' should be 'at work'. 'It has an instantaneous or load in where I work' is unclear and likely means 'it is very busy where I work'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity and correct preposition use.

× I think because it's. Order, organize. Some people don't do it spontaneously and. And do you want to do it instead? Because they don't want to think.

✓ I think it's about order and organization. Some people don't do it spontaneously and don't want to do it because they don't want to think.

The original sentences are fragmented and have incorrect conjunction use. 'And do you want to do it instead?' is incorrect and should be 'don't want to do it'. The sentence should be combined and clarified.

× Transformative in on a paper because it's easy. It's easy for me, so. Memorize and see it immediately after I write it.

✓ I prefer to make a list on paper because it's easy for me to memorize and see it immediately after I write it.

'Transformative in on a paper' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'I prefer to make a list on paper'. The sentence structure is fragmented and needs to be combined for clarity and correct preposition use.

× Or for instance, last night I write my grocery grocery list.

✓ For instance, last night I wrote my grocery list.

The verb 'write' should be in the past tense 'wrote' to match the time reference 'last night'. Also, 'grocery grocery list' is a repetition and should be corrected to 'grocery list'.