List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and grammatical accuracy. Try to form complete sentences and directly answer the question first, then add specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I always make a list when I go shopping because I often forget what to buy. Making a list helps me remember all the items I need, so I don't miss anything important.

提案: Your response is unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain how making a list helps you, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I always make a list for my work because it helps me stay organized. When I have a list, I remember all the tasks I need to complete, so I can work more efficiently.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammar mistakes. Try to clearly state the reason why some people dislike making lists, using linking words and specific details to support your answer.

例: Some people don't like making lists because they feel it takes too much time. Also, they believe they can remember everything without writing it down, so they avoid making lists.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Clearly state your preference first, then explain why, using linking words. Use correct grammar and avoid repeating phrases unnecessarily.

例: I prefer to make a list on paper because I enjoy writing things down. It helps me remember better and feels more personal than using my phone.

× When I was go for a shop becauses it was remember.

✓ When I went shopping because I wanted to remember.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'was go' instead of the past tense 'went'. The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past action. Also, 'becauses it was remember' is incorrect; it should be 'because I wanted to remember' to express purpose in past tense.

× What can I buy? Things I will most of the times I forgot the things which can I go for by so that's the most important reason when I.

✓ What can I buy? Most of the time, I forget the things I need to buy, so that's the most important reason why I make a list.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. It mixes tenses and word order is incorrect. The correction rearranges the sentence for clarity and correct tense usage.

× Yes, I always make a list for our work.

✓ Yes, I always make a list for my work.

The pronoun 'our' is incorrect here as the speaker refers to their own work. 'My' is the correct possessive pronoun to indicate personal work.

× Vin Bick 'cause it's help to.

✓ Because it helps me.

The phrase 'Vin Bick' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. The sentence should express that making a list helps the speaker, so 'Because it helps me' is appropriate. Also, 'it's help to' is grammatically incorrect; 'it helps me' is correct.

× Two do for work. I when I make a list. Then I will always remember the things which can.

✓ When I make a list, I can always remember the things I need to do for work.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. The correction combines the ideas into a coherent sentence with proper word order and tense.

× Be 'cause people now that when he make a list.

✓ Because people know that when they make a list,

The pronouns 'he' and 'people' do not agree. 'People' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they'. Also, 'now' should be 'know'.

× Then he did not. LAUSD anything.

✓ Then they do not miss anything.

The phrase 'did not LAUSD anything' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. The intended meaning is that people do not miss anything when they make a list. The verb should be in present tense 'do not miss' to match the general truth.

× Missing any things he so that's the motion reason people making her list.

✓ They do not miss anything, so that's the main reason people make their list.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains errors like 'motion reason' instead of 'main reason' and 'making her list' instead of 'make their list'. The correction fixes these errors and improves sentence structure.

× I think I I was preferred to make a list on a paper bill cause.

✓ I think I prefer to make a list on paper because

The phrase 'I was preferred' is incorrect; it should be 'I prefer'. Also, 'a paper bill' is incorrect; it should be 'on paper'. The sentence is corrected for proper verb tense and word choice.

× I'm very interested to write things and I was.

✓ I'm very interested in writing things and I was.

The phrase 'interested to write' is incorrect; it should be 'interested in writing'. The sentence is corrected for proper preposition use.

× I think when I try to make make list then.

✓ I think when I try to make a list, then...

The sentence is incomplete and has repeated words 'make make'. The correction removes repetition and adds an article for clarity.