List— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples.

例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go because it helps me remember everything I need and saves time. For example, last week, my list ensured I didn't forget any ingredients for a recipe I wanted to try.

提案: Your answer is too brief and lacks detail. Provide a complete sentence that directly answers the question and explain why making a list for work is effective or not. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I make lists for my work because they help me organize tasks and stay focused. This method works well for me since I can track my progress and meet deadlines more easily.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and logically. Provide specific reasons why some people might dislike making lists, and use linking words to organize your response.

例: Some people might dislike making lists because they find it restrictive or prefer to work spontaneously. Additionally, they may not see the benefits of planning ahead, which can make list-making seem unnecessary to them.

提案: Your answer is confusing and incomplete. Provide a clear preference and explain your reasons. Use complete sentences and linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: It depends on the situation. If I have my notebook with me, I prefer to write my list on paper because it's easier to see. However, if I don't have it, I use my phone to make a list since it's always with me.

× Yes, I would do a list before I go shopping and this will be clear to know and remember that items what I need.

✓ Yes, I would make a list before I go shopping, and this makes it clear to know and remember the items that I need.

The phrase 'do a list' is incorrect; the correct verb collocation is 'make a list'. Also, 'what I need' should be 'that I need' to correctly introduce the relative clause. Using 'makes it clear' fits better than 'will be clear' in this context.

× Yes, that's very smart way to make.

✓ Yes, that's a very smart way to make a list.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'very smart way' and the object 'a list' after 'make' to complete the meaning. The verb 'make' requires an object here.

× Uhm, I think maybe they have not asked a logical mind or it they they, they don't have a a very good teacher to tell them are.

✓ Uhm, I think maybe they do not have a logical mind or they don't have a very good teacher to guide them.

The original sentence is confusing and contains redundant words ('asked', 'it they they'). The phrase 'asked a logical mind' is incorrect; it should be 'have a logical mind'. Also, 'to tell them are' is incomplete and unclear; 'to guide them' is a clearer expression.

× And also I think maybe they're not leader.

✓ And also, I think maybe they're not leaders.

The noun 'leader' should be plural 'leaders' to agree with the plural pronoun 'they'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× They need just to follow.

✓ They just need to follow.

The adverb 'just' is better placed before the verb 'need' to form a natural sentence structure in English.

× And I think we don't need that.

✓ And I think we don't need that.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no correction.

× Uhm in depends if I have my notebook.

✓ Uhm, it depends if I have my notebook.

The phrase 'in depends' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'it depends'. 'In' is an incorrect preposition here.

× I will write it down and if I didn't.

✓ I will write it down, and if I don't.

The sentence mixes future tense 'will write' with past tense 'didn't'. To maintain tense consistency, 'didn't' should be 'don't'.

× Take along my notebook and pen ever do its own form?

✓ I take along my notebook and pen, or I use my phone's own form.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It seems to mean carrying a notebook and pen or using the phone's form. The corrected sentence clarifies this meaning with proper structure.